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    Post Dark Fairy Tale (Please correct my mistakes)

    Dark Fairy Tale.

    Once upon a time ago, in land far, far away in the middle of the woods stood a big castle forgotten by anyone. It seemed that nobody lived there, but when the sky came dark, people who living in the village nearby that wood could hear some strange noises during the night, but no one cared about it. There was happiness in village, until the children started missing. It was sunny day when the first child had left his house forever. All villagers were filled with hope, especially family that their children will came back, but days went by and there was no sign from missing children. One day a group of men decided to go to the wood, because they heard a legend about the mysterious strangers of the forest which have been handed on from generation to generation. They took some tools, holy water and cross just for case and left the village. The wood was so beautiful and peaceful, but they could feel the darkness aura surrounding them. After two hours they were finding a big castle which they heard from local stories. The door was closed, but they knew there was something wrong with this place. After that, they saw some small footprints and blood when they were looking around the castle and realized that probably itís belong to their missing children. The general sequence of events gave them no grounds for optimism. They imagined that their children were dying in cruel agony, alone, far away from home. The first thing they thought were vampires or another bloodsucking beasts who only attacked at night. Having no guarantee what they will meet in the middle of a mysterious building, without hesitation, ready to fight they sank into castleís darkness and they gone forever. They journey was not the end. After that, families in the village lost their loved children and husbands and lived in deep sadness and misery ever after, in that place of the mysterious deaths of people.





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    Re: Dark Fairy Tale (Please correct my mistakes)

    Once upon a time ago, in a land far, far away in the middle of the woods, stood a big castle forgotten by anyone everyone . It seemed that nobody lived there, but when the sky became dark, people who were living in the village nearby that wood could hear some strange noises during the night, but no one cared about it. There was happiness in the village, until the children started missing started to go missing.

    It was a sunny day when the first child had left his house forever. All the villagers were filled with hope, especially family that their children will came would come back, but days went by and there was no sign from of the missing children. One day, a group of men decided to go to the wood, because they heard a legend about the mysterious strangers(?) of the forest which have had been handed passed on from generation to generation. They took some tools, holy water and a cross just for in case and left the village. The wood was so beautiful and peaceful, but they could feel the darkness aura surrounding them it. After two hours, they were finding found a big castle which they had heard from local stories. The door was closed, but they knew there was something wrong with this the place. After that, they saw some small footprints and blood when they were looking around the castle and realized that probably it’s belonged to their missing children. The general sequence of events gave them no grounds for optimism. They imagined that their children were dying in cruel agony, alone, far away from home. The first thing they thought were vampires or another other bloodsucking beasts who only attacked at night. Having no guarantee what they will would meet in the middle of a the mysterious building, without hesitation, ready to fight they sank(?) into castle’s darkness and they were gone forever. They journey was not the end. After that, families in the village lost their beloved children and husbands and lived in deep sadness and misery ever after, in that place of the mysterious deaths of people. where people disappeared/died mysteriously.
    Last edited by tedmc; 06-Nov-2014 at 10:43.

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