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A weekend job: more money and sense
A weekend job is one of the first ways for teenagers to learn the basics of earning money and to feel a sense of responsibility Ė the things theyíll definitely need for life. So, letís look in to details, and find out: what is the importance of this experience?
Firstly, by working a part time job at the weekends teenagers will appreciate the value of money. I am sure that the majority of working teenagers will realize how difficult it is to make money. As a result of it, they will think twice before buying expensive clothes or shoes.
Secondly, a weekend job will provide teens with money, which they can put in a savings account. I think itís a good idea to have plenty of cash by the time a teen finish the high school and it might help teenís parents to pay for university. This money likely might go towards purchasing expensive books too.
Thirdly, a weekend job helps teenagers to learn how to arrange their time. In my opinion itís a vital skill, and weekend job better than anything else could teach a teen to do that. For instance, a teenager has to make good use of his time and spend it properly on both studying and working.
At the same time, I have to confess, that working at weekends interferes with oneís social life. Teens spend all weekends at work and donít have time to spend it with friends. But there is also a good opportunity to make new friends and connections at work.
To sum up the foregoing, I would like to point out the fact that weekend job is a highly satisfying experience for teenagers, that will prepare them for the adult life. The things they will benefit from this experience will help them better adapt for the future.
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