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My favorite movie is "A Walk To Remember". This is my favorite movie because it deals with real life issues, like some of the most important things in life such as: love, relationships, and most important, who your real friends are. "A Walk To Remember is about a girl named Jamie (Mandy Moore) who is the daughter of a minister who becomes ill. During high school Jamie doesn't have very many friends but is in alot of activities and through that she meets a reckless boy named Landon. Landon Played a lead role as did Jamie, even though they didn't hang out in the same crowd of friends when Landon needed help with his lines in the play he turned to Jamie to help him out. Londan fall in love with her. But,Jamie finally told Landon that she had cancer and the treatment stoped working so she didn't have very much time to live. Jamie had this list of accomplisments that she wanted to make before she passed. The number one thing was to get married at the same church that her mother and father was married in. Landon made ALL of her dreams come true. But unfortunitally her cancer became worse and she died. I liked this movie and I would recommend this movie to anyone who likes heart touching stories,
I think that you have done a very good job.
I have made a few suggested changes (above).
May I respectfully point out two things:
1. Writing teachers tell us to "tighten" our writing. That is to say, we should delete (erase) unnecessary words.
2. Movie reviews, I believe, are usually written in the present tense.