Review My Cover Letter for Erasmus Mundus Scholarship

[Tarheel]

I have also heard about this Master’s program from my university teachers. As I went through the details of the website, I was incredibly inspired to learn that the course curriculum of this program fits best with my objectives. The consortium with its vigorous network of faculty members and researchers, having interests in a comprehensive range of topics in Information Technology and Business Intelligence has attracted me the most. So, I choose IT4BI to enhance my knowledge a lot more in Business Intelligence.

As my long-term goal is to be actively involved with research and teaching, pursuing a master’s degree in Business Intelligence from a program of international eminence would be the crucial step towards this goal and Europe – being a melting pot of diverse cultures and a seat of quality higher education - is the place to go. I had always cherished the hidden dream becoming a part of a distinguished European research community and I believe my dream will come true someday.

I do believe that I possess the required aptitude, discipline, motivation and resolution for Erasmus Mundus Master’s Program in IT4BI. It is my firm conviction that I have the potential to thrive in this particular area and to make a significant contribution to Business Intelligence with my computer science knowledge if I am given the opportunity. I strongly believe that my inspiration behind contributing some ideas to the field of decision making, and in addition to that my educational background, my professional background and deep interest in this field of study would make me a very good candidate for IT4BI.

Thank you for giving me the opportunity to write and hoping for a favorable decision regarding my scholarship at Erasmus Mundus IT4BI soon.

Sincerely,

Well, it looks like I finished, doesn't it?

[bassam123]

Thanks a lot for the help sir! Sorry for mistook your question there! I actually try to explain my work that is to code logic that comes from customer as requirements and integrate it with the database (back-end) to store data. As development of a system considered as a project so it has some stages of development which are the methodologies. And some technologies I have used to develop a particular system.:) (I hope this explain u what I meant in that particular paragraph).

I do appreciate your help, this means a lot sir! You have spent a lot of time analyzing this. :)

Yes you do finished it! but I am going to bug u a bit again by helping me with this specific para! Can you review it?

"Since my long-standing goal line is to actively take part in research and to participate to my country’s IT industries afterwards, pursuing a master’s degree in Business Intelligence from a program of international prominence would be the essential stride in the direction of this goal. Besides, Europe – being a hodgepodge of divine diverse cultures and a base of quality higher education - is the place to go. I had always admired the secret dream to be a part of eminent European research community and I believe my dream must turn into reality someday."

[Tarheel]

Thanks a lot for the help sir! Sorry for mistook your question there! I actually try to explain my work that is to code logic that comes from customer as requirements and integrate it with the database (back-end) to store data. As development of a system considered as a project so it has some stages of development which are the methodologies. And some technologies I have used to develop a particular system.:) (I hope this explain u what I meant in that particular paragraph).

I do appreciate your help, this means a lot sir! You have spent a lot of time analyzing this. :)

Yes you did finish it! but I am going to bug u a bit again by helping me with this specific para! Can you review it?

Yes, I can. But you can't make me.

"It has been my ambition for a long time to actively take part in research and to participate to my country’s IT industry. Obtaining a master’s degree in business intelligence would be an essential step in the direction of achieving this goal. Europe is the place to go. I have long had the goal of becoming a part of the European research community, and I believe my dream will turn into reality someday."

We are going to Europe now, are we?

[bassam123]

Lol! Hopefully, we are! :P! Sorry for my grammar mistake there.:P U have omitted the part of cultural interest! I'm confuse whether to include the cultural interest or not. Some said yes others said no. Is it necessary to include it!.

[Tarheel]

I am not sure what you mean about cultural interest (but I can't remember everything), however, I think you should include that if you want to. Perhaps you could say:

I am interested in learning more about cultures that are different than mine.

(Is that what "divine diversity" is about? (In any case, I don't recommend that you use that phrase.))

[bassam123]

Thanks a lot for the help sir! :)

[Tarheel]

OK. TTYL