More later.Please would you take a look and correct the mistakes in the first part of my short story, "The Lieutenant."
My compulsory military service could not have started worse. I sat in a second-class compartment together with my three fellow conscripts in a train that should take us to the north part of the country, when after about 40 minutes the train came to a sudden halt. I looked out the window and saw we had stopped in the middle of nowhere. All I could see was a village in the distance and some cows grazing peacefully in the field. Such abrupt stops were not extraordinary. Sometimes people did not bother to travel to the next train station, and they would pull the emergency cord and jump down before anyone could catch them.
Minutes passed and then someone spread the rumour that a woman had thrown herself under the train. People started to alight and we joined them. It was a warm and sunny day and I could hear cicadas chirping all around us. The smells of oil and grease were strong and tickled my nostrils. “There,” someone said and pointed with his hand towards the rail. I was just 19 years old and never before had I seen death so close. Along the rail and under the wheels, parts of a human body and clothes had been mangled
and mutilatedbeyond recognition. I saw something grey and gelatinous smeared on the rail and ballast I supposed it must have been her brain. As we continued to walk, we came to a bend from which she had jumped. A pair of brown high-heeled shoes and a beige bag stood neatly placed close to the rail. A sorrow welled up inside me and made me almost cry. It felt as if someone had punched me with full force in the stomach. She must have been a young woman, and I was asking myself what must have forced her into suicide. I glanced at my comrades and their faces told me that we shared the same feelings. We returned to our compartment and waited in sombre mood for the arrival of the police to examine the scene. An hour later, we were rolling again but we could not crack jokes or laugh.
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