[Essay] Need help for imporving one sentence

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Hi, everyone,

I have a sentence describing a bar chart as below. Any suggestion will be appreciated. (Just clicking in the image, and it will be enlarged.)
The chart as given above, a comparison between different numbers of urban residents and rural residents among 1990, 2000 and 2010, with a well-illustrated information reflecting an emigration phenomenon brought by urbanization (城镇化), entails mounting number of urban residents and dwindled number of rural residents, which are approximately from 300 million in 1990 to 600 million in 2010, and from 820 million to 680 million in the 2010 respectively.

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Say:

from 1990 to 2010


Say:


an increasing number of urban residents and a dwindling number of rural residents


In fact, the mass movement of people from rural areas to urban areas is what urbanization is.

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Hi, Tarheel,

I have another question. can I change:

", which are approximately from 300 million in 1990 to 600 million in 2010, and from 820 million to 680 million in the 2010 respectively. "

to

", which are approximately from 300 million to 600 million, and from 820 million to 680 million respectively. "

?

Since I have the "among 1990,2000 and 2010.", it seems I don't need to introduce the time after that.
 
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It shows an increasing number of urban residents and a dwindling number of rural residents.

And it's a lot easier to tell what the numbers are by looking at the chart than by reading the text.

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The number of urban residents increased from about 300 million in 1990 to about 600 million in 2010, and the number of rural residents decreased from about 820 million in 1990 to about 680 million in 2010.

I think that fixes it. (It was really confusing.)

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Yes, I think it is much better.
And is this sentence below also works?

"Rural residents has increased from 300 million to 600 million from 1990 to 2010 while urban residents has decreased from 920 million
to 680 million during that time."
 
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Yes, I think it is much better.
And does this sentence below also work?

"Rural residents has increased from 300 million to 600 million from 1990 to 2010 while urban residents has decreased from 920 million
to 680 million during that time."
No, it doesn't.

The expressions I have underlined are completely ungrammatical.
 

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The residents don't increase. It is the number of them that increases (or decreases).

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