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Pankaj Malik

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There are times when you are in blues. You know not what to say when and when not to say what. You're so utterly confused that things are hard to handle. Then, I listen to what my hearts says to me; I feel zero gravity; as light as air; one who's standing like a tree in the strongest of winds; just as wind only touches its leaves, wind touches my hair and I feel as if I were on air.
 

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Perhaps:

There are times when you are feeling blue. You don't feel like saying anything to anybody.


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Then you take a nap. When you wake up you feel better.

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I feel like I'm on fire.

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There are times when you are in blues. You know not what to say when and when not to say what. You're so utterly confused that things are hard to handle. Then, I listen to what my hearts says to me; I feel zero gravity; as light as air; one who's standing like a tree in the strongest of winds; just as wind only touches its leaves, wind touches my hair and I feel as if I were on air.

It reads like a poem. Perhaps (in addition to what I said before):

You are utterly confused and feel out of balance. Then you listen to what your heart says to you. You feel as light as air -- like a feather. The wind takes you anywhere and everywhere. You fly. You float on air.

(I don't know why you abruptly switched from third person to first person.)

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