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    What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    I can't find the structure that I was looking for. Could anybody help me out to make these sentences logically and grammatically better?


    "During last four years, I always considered as a minority for the university's community. This fact not only did not isolated me, but also encouraged me even more to participate in more social activities."

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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    "During last four years, I have always been considered a minority by the university community. However, they did not isolate me; they encouraged me even more to participate in social activities."
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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    Not a teacher

    My attempt:

    "During the last four years, I always considered myself as a minority member in the university. However, this has not discouraged my involvement in various social activities. If anything, it's a form of encouragement."
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 14-Dec-2014 at 23:09. Reason: Adding 'Not a teacher'.
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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    It depends upon what you are trying to say. Did you think of yourself as a minority - that is, because you were a member of an under-represented ethnicity, you felt as if you were a minority member? Or were you "officially" a minority - that is, you received a scholarship based on your ethnicity, or received certain treatment because of your ethnic background? Are you saying that the university recognized your minority status and encouraged you to get involved in student activities?

    Or are you saying that it was made apparent by the treatment you received from others on campus that you were a minority student? You felt ostracized but you did not let it get you down; instead you made an effort to assimilate with the other students, and study hard to get good grades so that no one could accuse you of "getting by" because you're a minority?

    Clarification is needed in order to properly rephrase your statement.

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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    Perhaps:

    During the last four years I have been considered a minority in the university community. That not only didn't isolate me, but it encouraged me to participate in social activities.


    If I was going to participate in social activities, wouldn't that mean I would have to be around people?


    (A sentence can, as I have said before, be perfectly grammatical but not really make sense.)


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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    Quote Originally Posted by MikeNewYork View Post
    "During last four years, I have always been considered a minority by the university community. However, they did not isolate me; they encouraged me even more to participate in social activities."
    hi Mark and thanks for your answer.
    but I want to brag about myself ( ) not the university's community. Is the following statement correct?do you have any other suggestion?

    During last four years, I have always been considered a minority by the university community. However, this fact did not isolate me; it even encouraged me more to participate in social activities.

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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    Your revision is fine if you add "the" as the second word.

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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    Maybe you mean to say that you are different for some reason, but that hasn't led you to isolate yourself. You have participated in social activities as much as anybody. (The "university community" is just a bunch of people in the same place.)


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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    No, I did not get any scholarship based on my ethnicity, I am saying that it was made apparent by the treatment I received, I was member of an under-represented ethnicity.

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    Re: What is the best structure to talk about this intention?

    I don't understand. If you are Iranian and you are in Iran how can you be a member of an under-represented ethnicity? Were you discriminated against in some way?


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