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    make this sentence natural

    Could you help me make the following sentence more acceptable to native speakers? Are there any grammatical mistakes? Thank you.

    Learning from the Hyde School, values such as courage, integrity, leadership, curiosity and concern are the first most important lesson in some public urban schools in our country.

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    Re: make this sentence natural

    It doesn't work at all for me. How about: Hyde School teaches values such as courage, integrity, leadership, curiosity and concern as the most important primary lessons in life.

    The part about some public urban schools makes no sense to me if you want to show the exceptional qualities of this school.

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    Re: make this sentence natural

    Five qualities cannot be "the first most important". They can be "the most important".

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    Re: make this sentence natural

    There is a difference between values and character traits. Perhaps:

    Hyde School teaches leadership skills. Hyde School also teaches values such as honesty.


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