Could you please let me know when the registration will be closed?

[MS3330]

Could you please help me to revise the following short email?

"Dear ...,

Could you please let me know when the registration will be closed?


I would like to attend this seminar and I have to wait until next year for my supervise back from the annual leave and pay via internal transfer.

Kind Regards,
... "

 

[Tarheel]

Could you please help me to revise the following short email?

"Dear ...,

Could you please let me know when the registration will be closed?


I would like to attend this seminar, and I have to wait until next year for my supervise to get back from his/her annual leave, and then I will pay the tuition via internal transfer.

Kind Regards,
... "

 

[MikeNewYork]

"Supervise" is incorrect.

 

[tedmc]

What is an 'internal transfer'
Shouldn't it be 'telegraphic transfer'if it is for transfer of funds?

not a teacher

 

[MikeNewYork]

Does anybody use a telegraph these days?

 

[tedmc]

The transaction is done through internet of course but the term stays.
What do you can it then?

P.S. Maybe you can call it inter-bank online transfer.

 

[MikeNewYork]

I have not heard that term recently. I think your second sentence should be "What do you call it then?"

 

[tedmc]

The term 'telegraphic transfer' still appears in the bank forms when we do fund transfers, where I am from.

 

[MikeNewYork]

Strange. Quite out of date.

 

[Tarheel]

"Supervise" is incorrect.

That should, of course, be supervisor. (I didn't suggest a change to "internal transfer" because i wasn't sure what was intended by that.)

 

[Barb_D]

I suspect the person handling registration doesn't care at all why you can't register now.
He or she has the information you need: When registration closes.
Just ask that question and stop.