bspkumar
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- May 27, 2008
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- Telugu
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- India
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- India
Dear Teacher,
I work as a Business Development Manager for a IT start up. My manager had informed me that tone of one of my emails is not appropriate and told me to follow email etiquette when sending emails to senior managers. I copied the email conversation that I'm talking about below. Please let me know if have used inappropriate tone and suggest me better way to write an email.
Thank you in advance !
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Dear Ms. ABC,
As per our discussion, I have created the layout for an HTML email. PFA.
After tracking many emails that I sent to prospects, I found that they are not visiting our website after opening an email. Including our list of services and a "call to action" communication in the email helps us in influencing the prospects to visit our website. Please check the trailing mail below to find another template.
Also, inform the designer to strictly follow the rules mentioned in the following website while designing the template:
http://templates.mailchimp.com/getting-started/html-email-basics/
Let me know if you want to discuss further.
Thank you,
Prasanna
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Note:
I intentionally didn't start the last two sentences with "please" as I felt that repeated use of "please" doesn't sound good.
My manager always try to point out my mistakes whenever I suggest to modify the existing strategy of the company.
I work as a Business Development Manager for a IT start up. My manager had informed me that tone of one of my emails is not appropriate and told me to follow email etiquette when sending emails to senior managers. I copied the email conversation that I'm talking about below. Please let me know if have used inappropriate tone and suggest me better way to write an email.
Thank you in advance !
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Dear Ms. ABC,
As per our discussion, I have created the layout for an HTML email. PFA.
After tracking many emails that I sent to prospects, I found that they are not visiting our website after opening an email. Including our list of services and a "call to action" communication in the email helps us in influencing the prospects to visit our website. Please check the trailing mail below to find another template.
Also, inform the designer to strictly follow the rules mentioned in the following website while designing the template:
http://templates.mailchimp.com/getting-started/html-email-basics/
Let me know if you want to discuss further.
Thank you,
Prasanna
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Note:
I intentionally didn't start the last two sentences with "please" as I felt that repeated use of "please" doesn't sound good.
My manager always try to point out my mistakes whenever I suggest to modify the existing strategy of the company.