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  1. Newbie
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    #1

    Unhappy Please help me ..!

    Can anyone here help me ?
    I need teacher correct my paragraph


    Everyone uses technology, from children and teenagers to adults and elders.
    Technology is vital in today’s world and makes everything easier.
    Some examples are the computer, television, cell phone, and video game systems.
    Technology has influenced people and their daily lives, some better than others
    Technology has made an impact on retail.
    Now a day’s people do not need to leave their houses in order to get what they want.
    For example, there is no more need to go to the mall if one can order clothes online.
    There is no longer any need to get tired from walking around the malls, instead just go online and shop.
    Not only that, also there's many of advance in medicine like many doctors still exploring a cure for diseases such as cancer.
    Furthermore, technology has a big role for progress in our houses.
    Already technology had many of development in all kind of devices whether it at home or schools and buildings in the last 5 years.
    On the other hand, technology can increase productivity to help countries compete with other countries in selling goods and services.
    Some say that without technological improvements, the economy would grow slowly or not at all.
    Society could remain the same for years.
    Although there’s advantages for technology, there’s disadvantages for it.
    Unfortunately the relationship between relatives of friends isn't good than for example 4 years ago, because everyone depend on messages and emails.
    Therefore they're depend on the occasions to meet with.

    All in all, technology is good, but sometimes perhaps be not good.
    Therefore, avoid from its disadvantages.

  2. bhaisahab's Avatar
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    #2

    Re: Please help me ..!

    Is this homework?

  3. Tarheel's Avatar
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    #3

    Re: Please help me ..!

    It is best to understand what you are saying.

  4. emsr2d2's Avatar
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    #4

    Re: Please help me ..!

    That's not a paragraph. That's a series of, sometimes unconnected, sentences all written on separate lines.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

  5. Tarheel's Avatar
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    #5

    Re: Please help me ..!

    SARA.M, when are you going to turn this in to your teacher?


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