esj1011
Member
- Joined
- Jan 3, 2015
- Member Type
- English Teacher
- Native Language
- Korean
- Home Country
- South Korea
- Current Location
- South Korea
Hi,
Following is the part of the writing of my student. I did the correction for his writing, but I wonder if I have missed any grammatical error. I'd also like to hear from you if there is any awkwardness in his writing.
Thank you always.
Following is the part of the writing of my student. I did the correction for his writing, but I wonder if I have missed any grammatical error. I'd also like to hear from you if there is any awkwardness in his writing.
Thank you always.
[FONT=굴]Here are some solutions to prevent ferry disasters like Sewol. First, the government should start implementing stronger regulations to protect passengers and the safety of the ships traveling. In this new regulation, any misconduct which may put the safety of the traveling vessels in danger, including overloading the cargo, will no longer be allowed. Any company and its officials who violate the regulation must be punished in the full strength of the law.[/FONT]
[FONT=굴]Second, the Department of Transport, who is responsible for issuing crew licensing, should find the ways to improve crew communication and training. Captain and his crews always keep this in their minds that lives of passengers must come before anything. [/FONT]
[FONT=굴]I hope that we will be living in a world where people can travel without feeling any danger.[/FONT]
[FONT=굴]Second, the Department of Transport, who is responsible for issuing crew licensing, should find the ways to improve crew communication and training. Captain and his crews always keep this in their minds that lives of passengers must come before anything. [/FONT]
[FONT=굴]I hope that we will be living in a world where people can travel without feeling any danger.[/FONT]