[Grammar] Grammar correction needed

[piyal]

I want to know if the following line is grammatically correct or not -

"Attempting to get a job in Oil and Gas exploration industry has made me realize how ignorant I was about the real life."

I am confused, as I wrote this line just by converting what I thought in my native language, which sometime results in major grammatical error.

 

[Tarheel]

I want to know if the following line is grammatically correct or not -

"Attempting to get a job in the oil and gas exploration industry has made me realize how ignorant I was about [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] real life."

The words "oil" and "gas" are not proper nouns.
:roll:

I am confused, as I wrote this line just by converting what I thought in my native language, which sometime results in major grammatical errors.

Hm.

 

[piyal]

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes. I still dont know how to write it properly. Would you please rephrase it for me? That would be helpful.

 

[Tarheel]

There is nothing left for me to change. (What is "it"?)

 

[piyal]

There is nothing left for me to change. (What is "it"?)

I meant the sentence by "it". I just wanted to know how would you write the same sentence, as I am clearly incapable of coming up with something better. I want to put it in an essay but it just doesn't sound write. I want to preserve the sense the of the sentence but I'm not happy what I came up with to express it.

 

[Tarheel]

Well, you are not doing badly. in fact, your writing is easy to understand. (It is easy to understand what you mean to say even if you don't get it exactly right every time.)