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    Some Awkward Sentence need to be fixed

    1.The vulgar and hateful lyrics children are being influenced by them.

    2.Marla has no reason to grieve in sorrow when she has no one to blame but herself.

    3.For example, people sometimes get so angry that they would like to take someone else's life and murder them.

    4.To donate money to the homeless shelter is helping people stay warm in the winter.

    5.He has shown leadership in guiding, indeed sometimes demanding of them, to keep their focus on the task at hand.

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    Re: Some Awkward Sentence need to be fixed

    Is this homework?

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    Fix Awkward Sentences

    1.The vulgar and hateful lyrics children are being influenced by them.

    2.Marla has no reason to grieve in sorrow when she has no one to blame but herself.

    3.for example, people sometimes get so angry that they would like to take someone else's life and murder them.

    4.To donate money to the homeless shelter is helping people stay warm in the winter.

    5.He has shown leadership in guiding, indeed sometimes demanding of them, to keep their focus on the task at hand.

    Would you please help me fix the sentences because I have no idea?

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    Re: Fix Awkward Sentences

    I asked you before if this was homework. Rather than answer, you posted the same question again. Please do not do that.
    Last edited by MikeNewYork; 05-Feb-2015 at 18:41. Reason: extra word

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    #5

    Re: Fix Awkward Sentences

    It is just some practicing sentence from my mind, and that's all.

    Thank You

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    Re: Fix Awkward Sentences

    Identical threads merged. I have left both posts in full to show how things proceeded after MikeNewYork's first response.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Some Awkward Sentence need to be fixed

    1.The vulgar and hateful lyrics children are being influenced by them.
    Children are being influenced by the vulgar and hateful lyrics

    2.Marla has no reason to grieve in sorrow when she has no one to blame but herself.
    Marla has no reason to grieve in sorrow when she has no one to blame but herself.

    3.For example, people sometimes get so angry that they would like to take someone else's life and murder them.
    For example, people sometimes get so angry that they would like to take someone else's life and murder them.

    4.To donate money to the homeless shelter is helping people stay warm in the winter.
    To donate money to the homeless shelter is helping people stay warm in the winter.

    5.He has shown leadership in guiding, indeed sometimes demanding of them, to keep their focus on the task at hand.
    He has shown leadership in guiding, indeed sometimes demanding of them, to keep their focus on the task at hand.

    not a teacher

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    Re: Some Awkward Sentence need to be fixed

    What did you think was wrong with "the homeless shelter", tedmc?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Some Awkward Sentence need to be fixed

    A home is a shelter, so "homeless shelter" doesn't make sense.

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    Re: Some Awkward Sentence need to be fixed

    Yes it does. A "homeless shelter" is somewhere homeless people can go, usually just for one night, to get a warm meal and bed for the night. It is not, by any means, a home. They're also known as night shelters and emergency hostels.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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