Please see my corrections above. It is important to follow these rules of written English at all times:
- Start every sentence with a capital letter.
- End every sentence with a single, appropriate punctuation mark.
- Always capitalise the word "I".
- Do not put a space before a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.
- Always put a space after a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.
As you can see, your email address has been removed. That is not how this forum works. If you want us to look at your motivation letter, you need to post it publicly in this section and we will be able to look at it and suggest improvements.
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