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    #1

    Rewrite the sentence

    The team noticed that the population is ageing at a fast pace than expected while the assistance providing to the elders cannot catch up with the growing demand.

    The team noticed that the population is ageing at a faster pace than expected while the assistance provided to the elders cannot catch up with the growing demand of financial support.

    The second sentence is rewritten and I want someone to see which version is better. Thank you.

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    #2

    Re: Rewrite the sentence

    May I offer a third version?

    The team noticed that the population is aging at a faster pace than expected while the financial assistance provided to the elderly cannot catch up with the growing demand.

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    #3

    Re: Rewrite the sentence

    Do "elders" refer to old people among native speakers?

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    #4

    Re: Rewrite the sentence

    Not usually.

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