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    Rewrite a short notice

    This is to inform you that the snack shop would be temporarily closed from today to 21 Feb because of the Lunar Chinese New Year. It would be opened on 22Feb.

    May someone help rewrite the above notice? Thank you
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 19-Feb-2015 at 08:40. Reason: Sorted out line break formatting

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    #2

    Re: Rewrite a short notice

    Change both uses of "would" to "will".

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    #3

    Re: Rewrite a short notice

    Yslamac, why did you want to rewrite it?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Rewrite a short notice

    I think it is fairly written and I want a better version.

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    Re: Rewrite a short notice

    You can omit "Lunar." Saying "Chinese New Year" is enough. And when telling them when you will be closed implies that you will be open after that.

    Maybe just "The snack shop will be closed starting today for Chinese New Year. It will re-open on Feb 22."

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    Re: Rewrite a short notice

    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****


    Many writing teachers, I believe, tell us to make a notice short and snappy.

    Customers do not want to read a lot of unnecessary words such as "This is to inform you" and "temporarily."

    Maybe something like:

    "The snack shop will be closed from February 19 through February 21 because of the Lunar New Year."


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    I deleted "Chinese," for I believe that some other Asian cultures also observe the Lunar New Year.

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