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I'm a new English learner, and I am going to take the IELTS test next month. Could you help me to correct my grammar and point out what I can do to enhance my writing. Thanks you so much.
You are considering a career in sport and have been offered a scholarship by an American university to pursue this goal. You know your parents want you to pursue a more academic career. Write a letter to your parent, explaining why you intend to accept the scholarship. Sign your name Jackie
You have been working in Singapore for more than a month and I miss you so much. I have some good news to tell you. I have been offered a scholarship by MIT which is an American university to pursue my goal of being a swimming athlete.
This scholarship would give me a valuable opportunity to study PE there while offering me a great amount of advanced training in swimming at the same time. They said school would also offer me US$3000 a month for my school and living expenses there. That means all my expenses there will be covered! It is a rare chance for me to further develop my swimming skills. Dad, I really want to take this opportunity and make swimming be my career.
To become a swimmer has always been my dream. Do you remember my first time swimming when I was a child? I was excited when I was swimming in the water. I spent a whole day there and even refused to go home. At that moment, I fell in love with the water. Could you see how interested I was in swimming? In my secondary school life, I joined a wide variety of swimming clubs and advanced swimming teams, and participated in international swimming competitions, joint school matches Ö. etc. Also, I got numerous awards after these competitions and many praises too. These prove that I am capable of being a swimming athlete, based on my extraordinary achievements and ability. I believe that accepting the scholarship is the best idea. Right?
I understand your wanting me to pursue a more academic career choice rather than swimming so that I could survive in the high competitive environment in society. I know what you mean but I have to say I am not good at studying. As you know, I am not interested in study and learning in school. I was always daydreaming and sleeping while having lessons. Therefore, my academic results were mostly average. Next year will be the public examination. I canít imagine how miserable my result will be if you force me to take the examination. It is so hard for me to improve my performance in English and biology in a year. Taking the scholarship is my only chance to achieve my dream of becoming a swimming athlete without taking any examination. It is my choice for my future.
In addition, I know you want me to be an engineer and follow your footsteps as you believe that being an engineer can earn a lot of money to support my life in future. Besides, you always claim that being an athlete has no future at all. However, studying PE in MIT is not really bad. There are many swimming athletes who have graduated from there earning more than US$100000 a month such as Fred Phelps. Therefore, I am sure that being an engineer is not the only way to secure my quality of life.
I am an adult already so I hope I can choose my way for the future. I promise that I will put my best effort in studying and training in MIT. Please think about my viewpoint, Dad. I wonít let you down and I would be the best swimmer in the future.
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