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    Plumber

    I am testing myself making up sentences to see how I progress with grammar. (Context is rubbish.) Are they correct? The brackets indicate my doubts.

    “Hi, this is plumber John speaking”. “A plumber?” I asked surprised. “Yes, the plumber of Oxford Street, John Jackson, Jr, who did your bathroom last year”. “I remember now,[yes, of course], how could I forget. I’m sorry, Mr. Jackson”, I said, scratching my head, “hello, are you well? How can I help?” “Now then, I can come tomorrow, 3 June [-] Thursday, that is.” Are you sure you haven’t got your appointments mixed up, Mr. Jackson?” “No, Mr. Smith”, he replied, “your wife rang me and asked if I would be available this Thursday, hence the call. I have already bought what she asked for, i.e., white tiles, kitchen sink and new taps. My son, Rob, will give us a lift. Tomorrow, I will turn up with my apprentice George who cannot drive[] and the day after tomorrow, I will bring another apprentice, Henry, with me. You met Rob - my only child[,] last time.”
    The difference between the almost right word and the right word is really a large matter - 'tis the difference between the lightning-bug and the lightning.
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    Re: Plumber

    There are some problems. For example, the first sentence. (See below.)

    Quote Originally Posted by Auldlangsyne View Post

    “Hi, this is plumber John speaking”.
    That's not natural. Also, since the entire sentence is a quote the period should go inside the quote marks. Try:

    "Hi, this is John speaking. I'm the plumber."


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    Re: Plumber

    Try:

    "A plumber?" I asked, surprised.
    "Yes, I'm John Jackson, Jr. I remodeled your bathroom last year."
    "Oh yes! I remember you now. How can I help you?"


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    #4

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    Mr. Jackson: "I'm all ready to start work on your kitchen."


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    Mr. Smith: "Are you sure you haven't got your appointments mixed up, Mr. Jackson?"
    Mr. Jackson: “No, Mr. Smith. Your wife rang me and asked if I would be available this Thursday, hence the call. I will be ready to start tomorrow. I have already bought what she asked for, i.e.,white tiles, kitchen sink and new taps. My son, Rob, will give us a lift. Tomorrow, I will turn up with my apprentice George, who cannot drive, and the day after tomorrow, I will bring another apprentice, Henry, with me. You met Rob, my only child, last time.”


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    Re: Plumber

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    I will turn up with my apprentice George, who cannot drive, and the day after tomorrow, I will bring another apprentice, Henry, with me. You met Rob, my only child, last time.”


    Hm.
    And no comma before George? I actually wanted to put it in there. There are more than one apprentices.

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    OK, throw in a comma before George. (Say: "There is more than one apprentice.")


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    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    (Say: "There is more than one apprentice.")

    I meant to change it, but I had already switched the computer off.

    (I will count them twice, next time.)
    Last edited by Auldlangsyne; 08-Mar-2015 at 23:16.
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