[Grammar] Pitch presentation

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dario_cro

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Hi. I'm writing presentation for the pitch. Could you please check for grammar mistakes.

Did you know? There is more than 1 500 000 people worldwide who breeds more than 800 different breeds of pigeons?
They are organized in associations, leagues/alliances and clubs.
We are going to take 10% of each sold pigeon via auctions. At least 2 big auctions are held per year.
What do we need the money for? To gather pigeon fancier elite to partner up with us. The benefits are: becoming much more influential and creating powerful brand
 

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[STRIKE]Did [/STRIKE]Do you know[STRIKE]? There is[/STRIKE] that there are more than 1 500 000 people worldwide who breed[STRIKE]s [/STRIKE]more than 800 different breeds of pigeons?

They are [STRIKE]organized in [/STRIKE] from associations, leagues/alliances and clubs.
We are going to take 10% of the proceeds from each[STRIKE] sold[/STRIKE] pigeon sold via auctions. At least[STRIKE] 2[/STRIKE] two big auctions are held per year.
What do we need the money for? To gather pigeon fancier elite (?? enthusiasts?) to partner [STRIKE]up[/STRIKE] with us. The benefits are: becoming much more influential and creating a powerful brand.

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