Results 1 to 5 of 5
  1. Newbie
    Student or Learner
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Dutch
      • Home Country:
      • Netherlands
      • Current Location:
      • Netherlands

    • Join Date: Mar 2015
    • Posts: 2
    #1

    English motivation letter: help?

    Dear all,

    I would like to ask for your feedback on my letter. It's an English motivation letter, which I have to send to the university of my choice. I'm not a native speaker, therefore I need help of someone who can check my grammar and style.

    Thank you very much in advance!

    Here is my letter:

    Please indicate why you want to study at (....).


    • What is your motivation to choose for (...)? Please use maximum 250 words.


    There are a number of reasons why I chose for (...). The main reason is that I am of Vietnamese descent. My parents, who were both born and raised in Vietnam, raised me according to Vietnamese norms and values, while outside home I had to adapt to the Dutch culture. Therefore,I grew up speaking two languages and interacting with people coming from different cultural backgrounds. Consequently, I have always been most interested in the international and cultural aspects of life and from a young age my dream has been to have a career in an international setting.
    During my current Bachelors programme, (...), I have become more interested in international business rather than only languages. Unfortunately, I find that my current studies are not challenging enough, and the depth of the business and economic courses are minimal, in my opinion.
    Through talking to students of (...) University, I became very interested in the specific Bachelor track of (..) especially in the new specialisation (...). This specialisation possibility ultimately convinced me that this programme will offer me the perfect bridge between my cultural heritage and my future career in business. I believe that I will be able to continue to focus on the Asian market while developing more in-depth business skills with respect to more fields at the University than I am currently offered at (...).




    • What makes (..) a better match for you than other universities? Please use maximum 250 words.


    The reason why I think (...) is a better match for me is that I want to study in an international environment and (..) has created, in my opinion, the best international learning environment for students. (..) attracts a lot of international students with different cultural backgrounds. Hence, choosing this University will give me the chance to learn from and be stimulated by these students.
    Furthermore, the (...) Bachelors programme very much appeals to me. In October last year I attended a lecture at the University about (..), in which the lecturer talked about (...). What really excited me during this lecture was its content and fast-paced tempo, which challenged me in a way that my current Bachelors does not. In fact, I got even more curious about the rest of the courses at the University.
    Moreover, I chose to study in (..) because of its international character, the city atmosphere and the easy access to (...).
    Again, I want to emphasise my heritage. I grew up in two cultures and that has taught me how to adapt to different environments and cultures. This is a very important quality to me and I think that this quality is also very valuable to (...). To conclude, I believe (..) University is a good match for me because I feel that the environment in the university suits my personality better than other universities.



    • What competencies do you expect to develop during your study at our (..)? Please use maximum 250 words.


    I expect to develop at least some of these competencies:
    Organizational competency. I think this competency is very important if you want to make a career as an entrepreneur or employee in an international company. I think this is a competency that can influence ones whole career and success. I will need this competency, for example, when I want to start a business of my own.
    Management competency. I also expect to develop management competencies during the studies. I believe that it is very important to know how to manage employees and relations in your own business. Developing this competency and improving this will help my career and success later on.
    I also expect to develop my understanding of finance during the studies. I think this is also essential when you want to understand the environment that influences the business you work in, such as the markets and your competitors.

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Chinese
      • Home Country:
      • Hong Kong
      • Current Location:
      • Indonesia

    • Join Date: Mar 2015
    • Posts: 155
    #2

    Re: English motivation letter: help?

    Dear all,

    I would like to ask for your feedback on my letter. It's an English motivation letter, which I have to send to the university of my choice. I'm not a native speaker, therefore I need help of someone who can check my grammar and style.

    Thank you very much in advance!

    Here is my letter:

    Please indicate why you want to study at (...).


    • What is your motivation to choose for (...)? Please use maximum 250 words.


    There are a number of reasons why I chose for (...). The main reason is that I am of Vietnamese descent. My parents, who were both born and raised in Vietnam, raised me according to Vietnamese norms and values, while outside home I had to adapt to the Dutch culture. Therefore, I grew up speaking two languages and interacting with people coming from different cultural backgrounds. Consequently, I have always been most interested in the international and cultural aspects of life and from a young age. My dream has been to have a career in an international setting.

    During my current Bachelors programme, (...), I have become more interested in international business rather than only languages. Unfortunately, I find that my current studies are not challenging enough, and the depth of the business and economic courses are minimal in my opinion.

    Through talking to students of (...) University, I became very interested in the specific Bachelor track of (...) especially in the new specialisation (...). This specialisation possibility ultimately convinced me that this programme will offer me the perfect bridge between my cultural heritage and my future career in business. I believe that I will be able to continue to focus on the Asian market while developing more in-depth business skills with respect to more fields at the University than I am currently offered at (...).




    • What makes (...) a better match for you than other universities? Please use maximum 250 words.


    The reason why I think (...) is a better match for me is that I want to study in an international environment and (...) has created, in my opinion, the best international learning environment for students. (...) attracts a lot of international students with different cultural backgrounds. Hence, choosing this University will give me the chance to learn from and be stimulated by these students.

    Furthermore, the (...) Bachelors programme very much appeals to me. In October last year I attended a lecture at the University about (...), in which the lecturer talked about (...). What really excited me during this lecture was its content and fast-paced tempo, which challenged me in a way that my current Bachelors does not. In fact, I got even more curious about the rest of the courses at the University.

    Moreover, I chose to study in (...) because of its international character, the city atmosphere and the easy access to (...).

    Again, I want to emphasise my heritage. I grew up in two cultures and that has taught me how to adapt to different environments and cultures. This is a very important quality to me and I think that this quality is also very valuable to (...). To conclude, I believe (...) University is a good match for me because I feel that the environment in the university suits my personality better than other universities.



    • What competencies do you expect to develop during your study at our (...)? Please use maximum 250 words.


    I expect to develop at least some of these competencies:
    Organizational competency. I think this competency is very important if you want to make a career as an entrepreneur or employee in an international company. I think this is a competency that can influence ones whole career and success. I will need this competency, for example, when I want to start a business of my own.

    Management competency. I also expect to develop management competencies during the studies. I believe that it is very important to know how to manage employees and relations in your own business. Developing this competency and improving this will help my career and success later on.
    I also expect to develop my understanding of finance during the studies. I think this is also essential when you want to understand the environment that influences the business you work in, such as the markets and its competitors.
    ____________________________________

    Good job. I like your style of writing.

    I'm not a teacher so expect more checking, revision, and feedback.

  2. teechar's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Iraq
      • Current Location:
      • Iraq

    • Join Date: Feb 2015
    • Posts: 6,196
    #3

    Re: English motivation letter: help?

    There are a number of reasons why I chose for (...). The main reason is that I am of Vietnamese descent, and my parents, who were both born and raised in Vietnam, raised me according to Vietnamese norms and values, while outside home I had to adapt to the Dutch culture. Therefore, I grew up speaking two languages and interacting with people coming from different cultural backgrounds. Consequently, I have always been most interested in the international and cultural aspects of life and from a young age my dream has been to have a career in an international setting.
    During my current bachelors degree programme, (...), I have become more interested in international business rather than only in languages. Unfortunately, I find that my current studies are not challenging enough, and the depth of the business and economics courses are is minimal, in my opinion.
    Through talking to students of (...) University, I became very interested in the specific Bachelor's degree track of (..) especially in the new specialization - (...). This specialization possibility ultimately convinced me that this programme will offer me the perfect bridge between my cultural heritage and my future career in business. I believe that I will be able to continue to focus on the Asian market while developing more in-depth business skills with respect to more fields in your university than I am currently offered at (...).


    The reason why I think (...) is a better match for me is that I want to study in an international environment and (...) has created, in my opinion, the best international learning environment for students. (...) attracts a lot of international students with from different cultural backgrounds. Hence, choosing this university will give me the chance to learn from and be stimulated by these such a culturally diverse students body.
    Furthermore, the (...) bachelors programme very much appeals to me. In October last year I attended a lecture at the university about (...), in which the lecturer talked about (...). What really excited me during this that lecture was its content and fast-paced tempo, which challenged me in a way that my current Bachelors course does not. In fact, I got even more curious about the rest of the courses at the university. Moreover, I chose to study in (...) because of its international character, the city atmosphere and the easy access to (...).
    Again, I want to emphasize my heritage. I grew up in two cultures and that has taught me how to adapt to different environments and cultures. This is a very important quality to me and I think that this quality is also very valuable to (...). To conclude, I believe (...) University is a good match for me because I feel that the environment in the university suits my personality better than other universities.


    I expect to develop at least some of these competencies:
    Organizational competency- I think this competency is very important if you want to make one intends to build a career as an entrepreneur or to work employee in an international company. I think this is a competency that can influence ones whole career and success. I will need this competency, for example, when I want to start a business of my own.
    Management competency. I also expect to develop management competencies during the studies. I believe that it is very important to know how to manage employees and relations in your own business. Developing this competency and improving it this will help my career and success later on.
    I also expect to develop my understanding of finance during the studies. I think this is also essential when you want to for understanding the environment that influences the business one you works in, such as the financial markets and your competitors.

  3. Newbie
    Student or Learner
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Dutch
      • Home Country:
      • Netherlands
      • Current Location:
      • Netherlands

    • Join Date: Mar 2015
    • Posts: 2
    #4

    Re: English motivation letter: help?

    Thank you very much for reading and correcting my grammar and spelling. This helps me a lot! I am going to apply for the university very soon, wish me luck.

    Thank you again for your help!

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Chinese
      • Home Country:
      • Hong Kong
      • Current Location:
      • Indonesia

    • Join Date: Mar 2015
    • Posts: 155
    #5

    Re: English motivation letter: help?

    Wish you luck and no worries.

Similar Threads

  1. [Application] Is this a good motivation letter? Is my English ok?
    By Isabella Melo in forum CVs, Resumes and Applications
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: 18-Jun-2014, 13:27
  2. Replies: 1
    Last Post: 10-May-2014, 11:24
  3. Check the English for Motivation Letter
    By sweetmannu in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 12-Mar-2011, 17:44
  4. Need help for my english motivation letter
    By Poual in forum CVs, Resumes and Applications
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 29-Dec-2006, 11:55

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •