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    does this email makes sence

    Dear mrs. Dor


    Considering our meeting we had in the previous days(your positive attitude and encouragement to keep in contact with you).
    I am writing to inquire about the possibility of returning to work at ABC.
    I saw a job vacancy you posted on the internet for my former position -Educator.
    If I were to be rehired I can assure you that I can offer a long term commitment.
    Thank you in advance for your consideration.
    I look forward to hearing from you.


    Best regards,




    Last edited by netteen; 15-Mar-2015 at 23:14. Reason: Enlarged font to make it readable.

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    Re: does this email makes sence

    Welcome to the forum.

    There are several mistakes in your letter. Before we cover the grammatical errors, you should note that the word "I" must always be capitalised and that we do not put a space before a full stop. Please edit your post to correct those errors first.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: does this email makes sence

    thank you very much can you please help me to make it right.

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    Re: does this email makes sence

    Quote Originally Posted by netteen View Post
    Thank you very much. Can you please help me to make it right?
    In post #2, I gave you two ways to improve your post immediately. Why haven't you followed my suggestions?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: does this email makes sence

    Thanks.I am in need to have a formal email.Deadline is in two days and as you can see I have mistakes

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    Re: does this email makes sence

    Quote Originally Posted by netteen View Post
    Dear Mrs. Dor

    Considering our meeting we had in the previous days(your positive attitude and encouragement to keep in contact with you).
    With regard to our recent meeting, I am writing to inquire about the possibility of returning to work at ABC.

    I saw a job vacancy you posted on the internet for my former position -Educator.
    I noticed that you advertised the job I previously held (Educator) on the internet.

    If I were to be rehired I can assure you that I can offer a long term commitment.

    Thank you in advance for your consideration. (Space required after a full stop) I look forward to hearing from you.

    Best regards,
    Yours sincerely
    See above.
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    #7

    Re: does this email makes sence

    Thank you!You really helped me. All the best to you

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    Re: does this email makes sence

    You're welcome but please note that there is no need to write a new post to say "Thank you". Simply click on the "Thank" button in the bottom left-hand corner of any post you find helpful.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #9

    Re: does this email makes sence

    I am about to sent that corrected email all I need for the end is what to write on the subject?
    A. My full name or B. Application for a job

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    Re: does this email makes sence

    I would probably use "Regarding the recent job advert for "Educator" in the subject line.

    I don't know what else you might need to put in the email. It depends on whether this is a formal application for the job. If it is, there is probably an application form you have to fill in even if you used to hold the advertised position. You might even have to enclose your CV. Only you know what the requirements are for applying for this job.

    Your name goes at the end of the letter, after "Yours sincerely".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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