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    short essay

    hi all!
    please check my short essay if that acceptable (and ok with following checklist):

    topic question: what's your favorite pastime?

    My favorite pastime is TRAVELING.

    My favorite pastime is traveling, because i adore to see different places, people and everything that is not the part of my everyday life. I am really keen to travel by any possible way - a plane, a train, a car or a bike. Actually i enjoy the process of the transportation as much as the result. Some might say it's boring to sit in the plane ten hours but for me it's a perfect chance to read a good book, listen to new music, watch a favorite movie again or just to think about life and everything. I can't say that i have any particular favorite place to visit, I try to be every time in different place but generally I prefer Europe because it's not too far from the place I live and therefore this direction is cheaper.

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    The talk answers the topic question.
    The point of view or position is clear.
    The talk is direct and well-organized.
    The sentences are logically connected.
    Details and examples support the main idea.
    The speaker expresses complete thoughts.
    The meaning is easy to comprehend.
    A wide range of vocabulary is used.
    There are only minor errors in grammar.
    The talk is within a range of 125–150 words.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 24-Mar-2015 at 13:55. Reason: Enlarged font size to make it readable

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    Re: short essay

    Welcome to the forum.

    When will you submit this essay to your teacher?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: short essay

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Welcome to the forum.

    When will you submit this essay to your teacher?
    thanks for welcome!

    Apparently I don't have a teacher, I study by myself, I am my own teacher )

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    Re: short essay

    Quote Originally Posted by pavel4456754654 View Post
    Hi all!

    ​Please check my short essay if that to see if it's acceptable (and ok OK with following checklist):

    Topic question: What's your favorite pastime?

    My favorite pastime is TRAVELING traveling.

    My favorite pastime is traveling, because I adore to see seing different places, people and everything anything that is not the part of my everyday life. I am really keen to travel by any possible way mode of transport - a plane, a train, a car or a bike. Actually, I enjoy the process of the transportation traveling as much as the result destination. Some might say it's boring to sit in on the a plane for ten hours but for me it's a the perfect chance to read a good book, listen to new music, watch a favorite movie again or just to think about life and everything. I can't say that I have any particular favorite place to visit - I try to be every time in different go to a new
    place every time but generally I prefer Europe because it's not too far from the place where I live and therefore this direction is it's cheaper to get there.

    Checklist :
    The talk answers the topic question.
    The point of view or position is clear.
    The talk is direct and well-organized.
    The sentences are logically connected.
    Details and examples support the main idea.
    The speaker expresses complete thoughts.
    The meaning is easy to comprehend.
    A wide range of vocabulary is used. This could be improved.
    There are only minor errors in grammar. See my corrections.
    The talk is within a range of 125150 words. Have you counted the words?
    Quote Originally Posted by pavel4456754654 View Post
    Thanks for the welcome!

    Apparently I don't have a teacher. I study by myself. I am my own teacher. )
    See my corrections and comments above. Remember to capitalise "I" every time you write it.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: short essay

    emsr2d2,

    Wow, that's impressive correction, it's very usefull for me!
    Tnanks a lot!
    Have you counted the words? - Yes I have, automatically in Microsoft Word, there were about 140 words.

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