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    Editing for more effective topic sentences

    I have three topic sentences which sound weak and plain.

    *Geothermal power provides clean energy
    *Geothermal power provides sustainable energy
    *Geothermal power provides affordable energy

    How might I make these topic sentences more effective?

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    Re: Editing for more effective topic sentences

    Have you thought of combining them?

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    Re: Editing for more effective topic sentences

    If I combined them I would have to then create a two new paragraphs. I rather want to narrow it down to one the main/central idea for each paragraph. And argue/focus the points in each well.

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    Re: Editing for more effective topic sentences

    It provides clean/sustainable energy, but so what? If it's a topic sentence, couldn't there be a bit more in there, like a suggestion about how we should act as a result?

    Geothermal power provides sustainable energy, so we should be investing more in it. (Or something else to expand on the idea a bit(

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    Re: Editing for more effective topic sentences

    Quote Originally Posted by Whyte92 View Post
    If I combined them I would have to then create a two new paragraphs. I rather want to narrow it down to one the main/central idea for each paragraph. And argue/focus the points in each well.
    I'm not sure what you mean. Your topic sentence could be "Geothermal power provides clean, sustainable, and affordable energy."
    Since these are discrete properties, you could write a paragraph each on the cleanness, the sustainability and the affordability of geothermal power. But naturally, you must choose your topic sentence based on what you are going to write about. If you're not going to write anything about the affordability, don't put it in your topic sentence.

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    Re: Editing for more effective topic sentences

    1- Geothermal power can provide much needed clean energy to many countries in the world.
    2- In addition, geothermal power production represents a great source of sustainable energy.
    3- Furthermore, energy produced by geothermal power plants is highly affordable.


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