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4elsik

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Hello,

I've tried to combine few sentences into one (if that's correct to say). The original ones are the following:
...He lay on his bed reading late into the night... Every night before he went to sleep, Harry ticked off another day on the piece of paper he had pinned to the wall, counting down to September the first.

The sentences above describe what the boy's life had been for a month before September the first. Now it's September the first:
Waking up early the day he ticked off to every night he was reading late into, he was very excited and nervous about how different his life would become.

(I pretend the underlined to mean September the first.) Is my sentence grammatically correct? Would you understand it with the provided context?

Does the underlined part of the sentence imply that he only ticked off the days when he was reading till late night? (It's not clearly stated in the text if he did read every night though it's implied I'm sure, but he might tick the days off the nights he didn't read as well.)

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Waking up early the day he ticked off to every night he was reading late into,

This doesn't make sense I'm afraid.
 

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Does the following make sense? I guess it is the intended meaning.
'He woke up early on that day, and each day when he had read until late night had been ticked off.'

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No, Matthew, that is not really any clearer.
 

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What do you mean by "ticked off"?
 

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He put a tick beside the dates when he had read until late night. He ticked off the days.
Does it make sense?
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Apologies, I missed the part about the bit of paper by the bed! I had only seen the sentence containing "ticked off to every night he was reading late into" which we already know is grammatically wrong.
 

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Thanks for your replies!

I decided to say it just this way, I hope it's correct: Reading late into the night his new interesting books, Harry ticked off to September the first, the day when he was to go to King’s Cross station to set off for Hogwarts.
 

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Reading late into the night his new interesting books, Harry ticked off the days to September the first, the day when he was to go to King’s Cross station to set off for Hogwarts.
 

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I don't like "Reading late into the night his new interesting books ..." at all. I would change the word order to "Reading his new, interesting books late into the night ...".
 
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