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  1. Newbie
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    #1

    please help me with paragraph.

    teacher give me subject that '' in about 140 words, write a paragraph about the kind of job you would like to do after you finish your education''
    and this is my paragraph
    many people often ask me that:'' what would you like to do after you finish your education''. I immediately rely them:'' i want to be a bussiness man''. The requires for that are ability to communicate well, speaking indefinitely in front of the crowd, a bit of creation, etc... .But the most important is you must master on or some languages. I would like to do bussiness because it will bring about me so much benefit. firstly, i can improve my english skills enven learn other languages.secondly, i will contat with many people and acquire the knowledge from many different culturals and lastly i can have opportunity to go aboard for leaning not only qualification but life skills as well.In conclusion, for those reasons and benefits, i hope to be a good bussiness man on one day.

    i'm a newbie.please point out the mistakes and help me to fix them. i am going to take an english exam but my english so bad. i hope through this forum i can improve my english. thank you very much. i'm from vietnam, nice to meet you.
    Last edited by htkndc; 03-Apr-2015 at 15:36.

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    #2

    Re: please help me with paragraph.

    Hi htkndc

    - Capitalize the personal pronoun (I), regardless of its position in the sentence.
    - "Rely" is not the same as "reply."
    - "Require" is a verb.
    - "Indefinitely" is not the same as "confidently."
    - "Creation" is not the same as "creativity."
    - "Enven" and "contat" are not words in English.
    - Capitalize the first letter of every sentence.
    - Leave a space after a full stop.
    - "Cultural" is not a noun.

    I suggest that you make yourself familiar with some reliable dictionary websites including ones that cater to speakers of Vietnamese.
    You're always welcome to post more questions here.

  3. Newbie
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    #3

    Re: please help me with paragraph.

    hi teechar, thank for you answer.
    have i lack any ideas in this subject?

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    #4

    Re: please help me with paragraph.

    You were lucky to get the help you did from teechar. You started this post with a sentence which makes it clear that you were given this assignment by a teacher. We don't help with homework here. You must do the work yourself.

    Thread closed.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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