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    Security stopped our staff - grammar check to the sentences

    Is the below text grammatically correct?

    Our Safety officer arrived at Samsung gate for training around 12:45pm, but your securities haven't allowed. They also requested a Samsung representative to come at the gate and take him in. When he communicated to me, I unable to contacted you over phone. He tried twice at Samsung security gate with the relevant gate pass / an email copy, but they refused to allow him inside. Finally, he returned back at 2:30pm.
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    Re: Security stopped our staff - grammar check to the sentences

    Quote Originally Posted by Kumar Nadimuthu View Post
    Is the below text grammatically correct?

    Our Safety Officer arrived at the Samsung gate for training around 12:45pm, but your securities security haven't allowed didn't allow him entry/access/through. They also requested that a Samsung representative to come at ​to the gate and take him in. When he communicated to contacted me, I was unable to contacted contact you over the phone. He tried twice at the Samsung security gate with the an email copy of the relevant gate pass / an email copy, but they refused to allow him inside. Finally, He returned back at 2:30pm.
    See above for corrections.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Security stopped our staff - grammar check to the sentences

    Yes. Good corrections!

    It would sound more natural to write something like:

    - I couldn't reach you by phone.
    - I tried phoning but didn't reach you.
    - I phoned you, but you weren't there.
    - I tried calling but couldn't reach you.
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    Re: Security stopped our staff - grammar check to the sentences

    If I were writing the whole thing from scratch, I would probably use something like your alternatives. However, in the first instance, I always try to stick as closely as possible to the OP's version.

    It should be noted that "I phoned you but you weren't there" has a different meaning from the other three suggested sentences.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Security stopped our staff - grammar check to the sentences

    Yes, absolutely! I always try to do that, too, but you'd already done it. I often offer alternatives so students become familiar with conversational phrases. They don't always mean exactly the same thing, but I do aim for the same general meaning.

    Didn't mean to sound like I was correcting you. Your work was exactly right!
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