[Grammar] Please check. Is it correct?

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dkqmail

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Hi,
Could you please check and correct my writing?
Does my text sound natural, if no, how can I fix it?

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[..]
Work in the field engineer's thesis
• Designed wireless and wired network infrastructure
• Prepared the new architectural plans of the building along with plotted infrastructure of designed computer network
• Conducted advanced signal attenuation and radio interference measurements
[..]
Work placement
• Preparing work stations and training staff
• Administration of the Citrix XenServer virtualization platform
• Responsibility for system security and configuration of system rules
[..]
Work placement
• Setting up network devices, workstations and servers
• Network and application administration, problem detection and monitoring
• Administration of servers, development and implementation of new services
[..]
Work placement at the Network Department [..]
• Problem detection and monitoring, user support
• Participated in project work on the “A” system
• Administration of office network infrastructure and implementation of new services
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Thank you in advance for your help.
 

probus

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"Prepared the new architectural plans of the building along with plotted infrastructure of designed computer network."

That one appears to be a bit of an overstatement. Your resume indicates that you are an IT person. But the preparation of architectural plans is the job of an architect.

Otherwise all of your points seem to be acceptable in a resume.
 
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