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    Post An imaginary story of somebody's life [Really Short]

    Greetings to all users of this resource!
    A really weird and at the same time trivial idea was conceived in my head today. This happened during an extremely boring lecture when I started reading a book that dwells upon real historical events and was written by a military officer and might even be considered as a philosophical treatise. This book contains a fair amount of interesting words and constructions that were written out in my workbook. They are just random words and was taken from different contexts. And as I looked at the words my brain immediately began to depict a story and I decided to write it down. It might be regarded as a story or just as an extract or a text without any particular genre. I hope you enjoy reading it and that it would be worthy of your time.

    The purpose of this piece is to entartain the reader and to hopefully improve my English. I know I always make mistakes due to my inattentiveness, so It would be very generous of you if you corrected me.

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    The greatness and fierceness with which the war broke out were of something natural, but still are capable of beggaring imagination. Mottos, slogans, hope - everything seemed so incompatible with the reality now. The very ground of egalitarianism did not hold up against a brutal force of political interest.

    He was a distinguished officer among other guards of honour serving in the forces that were supposed to supplement a nation's military capability. But circumstances were now pushing him into undesireable affairs because his regiment was comitioned to become a part of a regular infrantry unit. In addition to that, when the situation was deteriorating a lot of conscripts were assembled and now constituted the most of the army. From this moment a vast majority of the army being under arms was full of ill-prepared soldiers and people that would rather exploit all possible examptions and resort to self-mutilation than engage in battle. The truth was that it was actually happening and some beggars ended up with being shackled to a rope, whereas the others were haunted down for desertion. Until recently these things remained a matter of contention leaving a little hope for human nature to change. [END]

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    Re: An imaginary story of somebody's life [Really Short]

    Quote Originally Posted by Revadim View Post
    Greetings to all users of this resource!
    A really weird and at the same time trivial idea was conceived in my head today. This happened during an extremely boring lecture when I started reading a book that dwells upon real historical events and was written by a military officer and might even be considered as a philosophical treatise. This book contains a fair amount of interesting words and constructions that were written out in my workbook. They are just random words and were taken from different contexts. And as I looked at the words, my brain immediately began to create/construct/imagine/conjure/invent [Brains don't depict.] a story, and I decided to write it down. It might be regarded as a story or just as an extract or a text without any particular genre. I hope you enjoy reading it and that it will be worthy of your time.

    The purpose of this piece is to entertain the reader and, hopefully, to improve my English. I know I always make mistakes due to my inattentiveness, so it would be very generous of you if you would corrected me.

    [****]

    The greatness and fierceness with which the war broke out were of something natural, but still is capable of beggaring imagination. Mottos, slogans, hope - everything seemed so incompatible with the reality now. The very ground of egalitarianism did not hold up against a brutal force of political interest.

    He was a distinguished officer among other guards of honour serving in the forces that were supposed to supplement a nation's military capability. But circumstances were now pushing him into undesirable affairs because his regiment was commissioned to become a part of a regular infantry unit. In addition to that, when the situation was deteriorating, a lot of conscripts were assembled and now constituted the most of the army. From this moment a vast majority of the army being was poorly armed and full of ill-prepared soldiers and people who would rather exploit all possible exemptions and resort to self-mutilation than engage in battle. The truth was that it was actually happening, and some beggars ended up with being shackled to a rope, while others were hunted down for desertion. Until recently these things remained a matter of contention, leaving a little hope for human nature to change. [END]

    Thank you for paying me with your attention! [That's not what pay attention means. Look it up.]
    Your written English is strong. Keep at it!
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    Re: An imaginary story of somebody's life [Really Short]

    Thank you for feedback, I really appreciate this as I was thinking about writing a continuation to this peace using a variety of words! At the end it might even be a complete story, I don't know! The only thing I'd like to specify is the usage of construction "to be under arms" in the meaning of being on duty. I do not really understand why I used it incorrectly...
    Last edited by Revadim; 09-Apr-2015 at 08:14.

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