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Hi,
Could you please check and correct my writing?
Does my text sound natural? If not, how can I fix it?

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Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a graduate of The Hague University of Applied Sciences in the field of computer science, and obtained my B.Eng. degree with specialization Network Engineering in 2013. I received diploma with honours for the best diploma thesis and a high average of grades at the Department of Informatics.

I have a diverse experience in network and systems administration, especially with Cisco and MikroTik devices. I have a special expertise in wireless and wired network design, devices implementation, users training and network infrastructure maintenance. Also, I am experienced in
programming scripts, algorithms and applications in a variety of languages. Owing my relevant qualifications and skills, I can offer you reduced overheads and expenditures by procuring most efficient and economical devices and utilizing limited resources efficiently. Furthermore, I am professionally certified from Cisco Networking Academy and Fluke networks.

With an outstanding reputation, I can provide excellent references at the appropriate time. If my background interests you, I hope you will contact me to suggest a time when we might meet in person. I am presently in Netherlands, but I will be in United Kingdom between 21[SUP]st[/SUP] April and 1[SUP]st[/SUP] June. I prefer contact through e‑mail. Thank you in advance for your time.

Yours sincerely,
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Thank you in advance for your help.
 

Tarheel

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Hi,
Could you please check and correct my writing?
Does my text sound natural? If not, how can I fix it?

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Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a graduate of The Hague University of Applied Sciences in the field of computer science, and obtained my B.Eng. degree with specialization Network Engineering in 2013. I received a diploma with honours for the best diploma thesis and a high average of grades at the Department of Informatics.

I have a diverse experience in network and systems administration, especially with Cisco and MikroTik devices. I have a special expertise in wireless and wired network design, devices implementation, users training and network infrastructure maintenance. Also, I am experienced in
programming scripts, algorithms and applications in a variety of languages. Owing to my relevant qualifications and skills, I can offer you reduced overheads and expenditures by procuring the most efficient and economical devices and utilizing limited resources efficiently. Furthermore, I am professionally certified from Cisco Networking Academy and Fluke networks.
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With an outstanding reputation[/STRIKE], I can provide excellent references at the appropriate time. If my background interests you, I hope you will contact me to suggest a time when we might meet in person. I am presently in Netherlands, but I will be in United Kingdom between 21[SUP]st[/SUP] April and 1[SUP]st[/SUP] June. I prefer contact through e‑mail. Thank you in advance for your time.

Yours sincerely,
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[STRIKE]Thank you in advance for your help.[/STRIKE]
 
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