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    letter of recommendation

    Hi everyone,

    i need help with a "letter of recommendation". This is my first try, can anybody check if everything is correct? Thanks in advance!

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    To Whom It May Concern:

    I highly recommend Stephan as a candidate for a position in your company. I found him to be consistently pleasant, tackling all assignments with dedication and a smile. Stephan worked for my Company for almost 4 years. During his time he was responsible for the production monitoring and documentation, including operative responsibility for the performance of the service.

    Stephan did an excellent job in this position and was an asset to our organization and demonstrated a deep understanding of his field. He has excellent written and verbal communication skills, is extremely organized, a quick learner, and is able to effectively multi-task to ensure that all projects are completed in a timely manner.

    I am without doubt that Stephan will be a valuable employee in your company. I enthusiastically recommend him and wish him the very best for the future.

    Sincerely,

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    Re: letter of recommendation

    During his time(service or tenure) he was responsible for the production monitoring and documentation, including operative responsibility for the performance of the service.

    responsible for operative responsibility for the performance of the service - this is not clear.

    Otherwise it is a well-written letter.

    not a teacher
    Last edited by tedmc; 18-Apr-2015 at 10:14.

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    Re: letter of recommendation

    how i can write this better? "operative performance of the service", " including operative administrating" or "including the operational control of the upcoming tasks" ? Thanks in advance!
    Last edited by rorschach; 18-Apr-2015 at 17:54.

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    Re: letter of recommendation

    Quote Originally Posted by rorschach View Post
    How can I can write this better?
    Note my corrections above. Remember to start every sentence with a capital letter and to capitalise "I" every time you write it. Also, look at the correct construction (word order) for a sentence.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: letter of recommendation

    I wouldn't use these jargons:
    operative adminstering - administration of the operation
    operational control of the upcoming tasks - control of the operation of upcoming task (isn't this redundant? What else is the operation for if not to perform tasks)

    During his tenure, his responsiblities included
    production monitoring and documentation and administration and control of the production operations.

    not a teacher
    Last edited by tedmc; 19-Apr-2015 at 11:48.

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