Student or Learner
The place for the concert was not appropriate because of the high price. Thus, I believe that if they had not hired that theater, they could have saved up much more money for the charity.
It's my sentences. I'm sure they are grammatically correct but they don't sound very natural. What would you say?
Please, correct all my mistakes. I should know English perfectly and if you show me my mistakes I will achieve my dream a little bit faster. A lot of thanks.
Not a teacher nor a native speaker.