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    #1

    Are these sentences good?

    1-I won't stop studying English until I go to Canada and start working after that I'll learn new things in English on their own.

    2-I'd like to retire when I die.

    3-I'll leave your home as soon as you pay me back my own money.

    4-I'll be really annoyed if I can't success about my future.

    5-I don't want to have children before I have so much money and a house.

    6-I'll have a big celebration if i get IELTS.

    7-I'll always live here unless i find a better house.


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    #2

    Re: Are these sentences good?

    Who wrote these sentences? Where did you find them? What are you going to do with them when you know if they're correct or not?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #3

    Re: Are these sentences good?

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Who wrote these sentences? Where did you find them? What are you going to do with them when you know if they're correct or not?
    I don't know they're correct or not and I wrote them for practice.

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    #4

    Re: Are these sentences good?

    Hi, Fanoos! The sentences are not good. Here are some hints to help you along:

    Quote Originally Posted by Fanoos62 View Post
    1-I won't stop studying English until I go to Canada and start working after that I'll learn new things in English on their own. How many sentences do you see there? And - on whose own?

    2-I'd like to retire when I die. Can you do things when you're dead?

    3-I'll leave your home as soon as you pay me back my own money. This is almost right. What is the difference between "my own money" and "my money"?

    4-I'll be really annoyed if I can't success about my future. This is a string of words and phrases that don't make sense. Try again!

    5-I don't want to have children before I have so much money and a house. How do we use the idiom "so much"?

    6-I'll have a big celebration if i get IELTS. 1. You missed a capital letter. 2. We get (or catch) diseases. This makes IELTS sound like a disease.

    7-I'll always live here unless i find a better house. You missed that capital letter again!
    Tell us what you figure out. Thanks!
    I'm not a teacher. I speak American English. I've tutored writing at the University of Southern Maine and have done a good deal of copy editing and writing, occasionally for publication.

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    #5

    Re: Are these sentences good?

    Quote Originally Posted by Charlie Bernstein View Post
    Hi, Fanoos! The sentences are not good. Here are some hints to help you along:



    Tell us what you figure out. Thanks!
    Hi Charlie.

    1-I won't stop studying English until I go to Canada and start working. After that I'll learn new things in English automatically.

    2-I'd like to retire when I be in 70.

    3-I'll leave your home as soon as you pay me back my money.

    4-________________________________________

    5-I don't want to have children before I have so much money and a house.

    6-I'll have big celebration if I get high score in IELTS.

    7-I'll always live here unless I find a better house.

    Are they good?

    Excuse me Charlie! could you help me abut letter 4?

    Last edited by Fanoos62; 11-May-2015 at 18:16.

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    #6

    Re: Are these sentences good?

    In sentence 4, you have tried to use "success" as a verb. It is not a verb. It is a noun. Does that help?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Are these sentences good?

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    In sentence 4, you have tried to use "success" as a verb. It is not a verb. It is a noun. Does that help?
    Is this correct?

    I'll be really annoyed if I can't successful about my future.


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    Re: Are these sentences good?

    "Successful" is an adjective. You need a verb after "I can't".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Are these sentences good?

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    "Successful" is an adjective. You need a verb after "I can't".

    I'll be really annoyed if I can't succeed about my future.

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    Re: Are these sentences good?

    OK, you now have the right verb. Now we need to look at the end of the sentence. Try "I'll be really annoyed if I can't succeed in the future".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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