[General] Are these sentences good?

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1-I won't stop studying English until I go to Canada and start working after that I'll learn new things in English on their own.

2-I'd like to retire when I die.

3-I'll leave your home as soon as you pay me back my own money.

4-I'll be really annoyed if I can't success about my future.

5-I don't want to have children before I have so much money and a house.

6-I'll have a big celebration if i get IELTS.

7-I'll always live here unless i find a better house.

 

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Who wrote these sentences? Where did you find them? What are you going to do with them when you know if they're correct or not?
 

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Who wrote these sentences? Where did you find them? What are you going to do with them when you know if they're correct or not?
I don't know they're correct or not and I wrote them for practice.
 

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Hi, Fanoos! The sentences are not good. Here are some hints to help you along:

1-I won't stop studying English until I go to Canada and start working after that I'll learn new things in English on their own. How many sentences do you see there? And - on whose own?

2-I'd like to retire when I die. Can you do things when you're dead?

3-I'll leave your home as soon as you pay me back my own money. This is almost right. What is the difference between "my own money" and "my money"?

4-I'll be really annoyed if I can't success about my future. This is a string of words and phrases that don't make sense. Try again!

5-I don't want to have children before I have so much money and a house. How do we use the idiom "so much"?

6-I'll have a big celebration if i get IELTS. 1. You missed a capital letter. 2. We get (or catch) diseases. This makes IELTS sound like a disease.

7-I'll always live here unless i find a better house. You missed that capital letter again!

Tell us what you figure out. Thanks!
 

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Hi, Fanoos! The sentences are not good. Here are some hints to help you along:



Tell us what you figure out. Thanks!

Hi Charlie.

1-I won't stop studying English until I go to Canada and start working. After that I'll learn new things in English automatically.

2-I'd like to retire when I be in 70.

3-I'll leave your home as soon as you pay me back my money.

4-________________________________________

5-I don't want to have children before I have so much money and a house.

6-I'll have big celebration if I get high score in IELTS.

7-I'll always live here unless I find a better house.

Are they good?

Excuse me Charlie! could you help me abut letter 4?

 
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In sentence 4, you have tried to use "success" as a verb. It is not a verb. It is a noun. Does that help?
 

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In sentence 4, you have tried to use "success" as a verb. It is not a verb. It is a noun. Does that help?

Is this correct?

I'll be really annoyed if I can't successful about my future.

 

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"Successful" is an adjective. You need a verb after "I can't".
 

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"Successful" is an adjective. You need a verb after "I can't".


I'll be really annoyed if I can't succeed about my future.
 

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OK, you now have the right verb. Now we need to look at the end of the sentence. Try "I'll be really annoyed if I can't succeed in the future".
 
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