UM Chakma
Member
- Joined
- Jul 17, 2013
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Bengali; Bangla
- Home Country
- Bangladesh
- Current Location
- Singapore
Hi there,
I have been practicing writing reports for an IELTS exam. As there is no one to check what I write, I presented one here just to have the errors in the sentence structures checked. I am not confident on what I have written. If you correct the mistakes such as punctuation and sentence structures, hopefully I will be able to avoid from making the same mistakes again. There, perhaps, would be inappropriate words used. Please kindly check them for me.
Let me type the report I want to have checked.
"The table indicates the percentage of students who attended four different secondary schools in the years of 2000, 2005 and 2009.
As seen in the table, most of the children went to the schools that were voluntary-controlled in 2000, but it seems the popularity decreased by 2009 in which year the most crowded secondary education institutions were the community schools.
In 2000, the proportion of attendance at specialist schools was 20%, but it gradually decreased in 2009 by 2%. Even in grammar schools, the percentage of participation dropped at 12% in 2009 which was 24% in 2000.
Overall, a bit more than half of the percentage of school children went to schools that were voluntary-controlled in 2000. The percentage sharply declined up to 20% in 2009. Community schools, by contrast, were not so popular in 2000, only 12% of the students attended. But rising at 32% in 2005, the schools became the highest in student participation in 2009, with 58%."
I have been practicing writing reports for an IELTS exam. As there is no one to check what I write, I presented one here just to have the errors in the sentence structures checked. I am not confident on what I have written. If you correct the mistakes such as punctuation and sentence structures, hopefully I will be able to avoid from making the same mistakes again. There, perhaps, would be inappropriate words used. Please kindly check them for me.
Let me type the report I want to have checked.
"The table indicates the percentage of students who attended four different secondary schools in the years of 2000, 2005 and 2009.
As seen in the table, most of the children went to the schools that were voluntary-controlled in 2000, but it seems the popularity decreased by 2009 in which year the most crowded secondary education institutions were the community schools.
In 2000, the proportion of attendance at specialist schools was 20%, but it gradually decreased in 2009 by 2%. Even in grammar schools, the percentage of participation dropped at 12% in 2009 which was 24% in 2000.
Overall, a bit more than half of the percentage of school children went to schools that were voluntary-controlled in 2000. The percentage sharply declined up to 20% in 2009. Community schools, by contrast, were not so popular in 2000, only 12% of the students attended. But rising at 32% in 2005, the schools became the highest in student participation in 2009, with 58%."
