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    Need help in correction of a sentence

    Hi All ,

    I have written the below sentence as a description , but I feel there is something wrong , or it doesn't sound simple . Please point if the below sentence is correct : " A well researched product which helps you to tap the vast information available digitally and convert into brain friendly way for efficient revision and memorization"


    Thanks for any pointers !!

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    Is the sentence correct ?

    Hi All ,

    I have written the below sentence as a description , but I feel there is something wrong , or it doesn't sound simple . Please point if the below sentence is correct : " A well researched product which helps you to tap the vast information available digitally and convert into brain friendly way for efficient revision and memorization"


    Thanks for any pointers !!

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    Re: Need help in correction of a sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by manojavam View Post
    Hi All ,

    I have written the below sentence as a description , but I feel there is something wrong , or it doesn't sound simple . Please point if the below sentence is correct : " A well-researched product which helps you to tap the vast information available digitally and convert it into brain friendly way for efficient revision and memorization"


    Thanks for any pointers !!

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    Welcome to the forums.

    As I read this, it's not a sentence. it's a giant noun phrase. Where is the main verb?
    Everything from "brain friendly" onwards is either awkward or ungrammatical.
    You are also missing end punctuation.

    But how is a product efficiently memorized?

    Try writing shorter sentences.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Need help in correction of a sentence

    Thanks for the pointers !! could you please suggest any modified form of the same sentence . Appreciate your help.
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 09-May-2015 at 22:48. Reason: Deleting unnecessary quote.

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    #5

    Re: Need help in correction of a sentence

    Why don't you try to rewrite it? It needs a main verb.

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    Re: Is the sentence correct ?

    The biggest problem with your sentence is that it isn't a sentence.

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    Re: Is the sentence correct ?

    Quote Originally Posted by manojavam View Post
    Hi all.

    I have written the below sentence as a description (no comma here) but I feel there is something wrong (no comma here) or it doesn't sound simple. Please point tell me if the below sentence is correct:

    "A well-researched product which helps you to tap into the vast amount of information available digitally, and to convert it into a brain-friendly way format for efficient revision and memorization."


    Thanks for any pointers!
    See my corrections above. As probus said, it's not a complete sentence. Presumably the name of the product and the word "is" should come before "a well-researched product".

    Note that we don't put a space before a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark. We don't put a space after opening quotation marks. A single closing punctuation mark is enough.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Is the sentence correct ?

    I have merged the two duplicate threads.

    *PLEASE* do not ask the same question more than once.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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