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    According to your negotiations with Mr. Y I would like to inform you the request

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    Dear Mr. X

    According to your negotiations with Mr. Y I would like to inform you the request products from the Z company are attached with this email with details, and please inform us the prices of those products is match with their request.

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    Re: According to your negotiations with Mr. Y I would like to inform you the request

    Quote Originally Posted by yaghoob View Post
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    Dear Mr. X

    According to your negotiations with Mr. Y, I would like to inform you that the requested products from the Z company are attached with to this email with details,. and Please inform us if the prices of those products don't is match with their request.
    This is one big run-on sentence. It needs punctuation and re-wording to break it up into a few separate sentences. It is also unclear what exactly you're trying to say. I've offered some basic changes based on what I can make out.


    I doubt that the products themselves (unless the products are some kind of electronic document) are actually attached to the email - do you mean the information or details requested about the products?

    I'm also uncertain what you mean by what you want to say with the prices matching, so my corrections on that sentence still don't make complete sense.

    I suspect you mean something other than 'negotiation', as well.

    If you'll explain the situation more clearly, we can help you re-write the letter more accurately.

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    Re: According to your negotiations with Mr. Y I would like to inform you the request

    Skrej wrote: "This is one big run-on sentence."

    The passage had some grammatical and punctuation problems, which you fixed in your reply. But it was not a run-on sentence until you deleted the "and".
    Last edited by probus; 15-May-2015 at 04:39.

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