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    Change a paragraph to different kind of writing.

    I changed the type of this paragraph to my own word writing, is it good?my writing is the red color one.

    Emigration for employment from countries within the region has grown at about 6 Percent annually over the last two decades, with about 2.6 million people leaving their homes in search of work each year.
    there is around 6 percent annually growth to emigrant for employment from region countries over the last two decades and in each year about 2.6 million people leaving their homes in order to find job.

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    Re: Change a paragraph to different kind of writing.

    Quote Originally Posted by yaghoob View Post
    I changed the type of have rewritten this paragraph to in my own words. writing, Is it good? (Space required here) My writing is the in red. color one.

    Emigration for employment from countries within the region has grown at about 6 Percent annually over the last two decades, with about 2.6 million people leaving their homes in search of work each year.
    There is around 6 percent annually growth to emigrant for employment from region countries over the last two decades and in each year about 2.6 million people leaving their homes in order to find job.

    Thanks.
    Please see my amendments to your post above in red and bold.

    Your version is not grammatical and it's not an improvement on (or as clear as) the original.

    You could start with "Annually, there has been a 6 percent growth in emigration for employment ...".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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