Results 1 to 6 of 6
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Persian
      • Home Country:
      • Iran
      • Current Location:
      • Iran

    • Join Date: Jul 2015
    • Posts: 6
    #1

    A/D: Technology desinged to make our life simply actually makes our life complicated.

    That technology has either a positive or a negative effect in people lives is always a challenge point. People always talk about pros and cons of technology. In this regard, quite a few people would deem that technology is detrimental for life, but others, in contrast, believe that it is very useful and practical for everybody. As far as I am concerned, technology has great impacts on simpler life in that not only does it make works fast and easier, but also it causes to impose the high quality of life.
    The first reason which should be mentioned here is that doing fast and quicker works is the most important role of technology in people lives. Technology helps people save their time and money. Indeed, using of technology is either time or cost effective. For example, nowadays, there are some universities in which are hold some online courses. So, students can participate in them without needing to commute between the university and their homes. Another example showing importance of technology is that individuals can transfer money by using Internet. Several number of money is transferred just in a few seconds through online accounts. It has a tremendous effect on urban life, especially in large cities, to reduce the air pollution and traffic problems.
    Another reason which should be seen by everyone is that technology affects the quality of people lives, it promotes to high level of it. There many high tech facilities which use for many purposes. For instance, some smart phones, besides that high quality of camera, can help to keep health by some applications controlling health of a person. Another example, latest conditioner of air both produce the air fresh and remove viruses which is existed in the air.
    By and large, technology has a wealth of advantages for people lives. It helps them to do works in an easy and fast way. Equally important, it adds high quality to personal life. In the future, all people will admire technology because of making their life simply. That technology has either a positive or a negative effect in people lives is always a challenge point. People always talk about pros and cons of technology. In this regard, quite a few people would deem that technology is detrimental for life, but others, in contrast, believe that it is very useful and practical for everybody. As far as I am concerned, technology has great impacts on simpler life in that not only does it make works fast and easier, but also it causes to impose the high quality of life.
    The first reason which should be mentioned here is that doing fast and quicker works is the most important role of technology in people lives. Technology helps people save their time and money. Indeed, using of technology is either time or cost effective. For example, nowadays, there are some universities in which are hold some online courses. So, students can participate in them without needing to commute between the university and their homes. Another example showing importance of technology is that individuals can transfer money by using Internet. Several number of money is transferred just in a few seconds through online accounts. It has a tremendous effect on urban life, especially in large cities, to reduce the air pollution and traffic problems.
    Another reason which should be seen by everyone is that technology affects the quality of people lives, it promotes to high level of it. There many high tech facilities which use for many purposes. For instance, some smart phones, besides that high quality of camera, can help to keep health by some applications controlling health of a person. Another example, latest conditioner of air both produce the air fresh and remove viruses which is existed in the air.
    By and large, technology has a wealth of advantages for people lives. It helps them to do works in an easy and fast way. Equally important, it adds high quality to personal life. In the future, all people will admire technology because of making their life simply.

  1. teechar's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Iraq
      • Current Location:
      • Iraq

    • Join Date: Feb 2015
    • Posts: 6,180
    #2

    Re: A/D: Technology desinged to make our life simply actually makes our life complica

    There's no doubt that technology has either a positive or a negative affected in people's lives in many ways. is always a challenge point. People always talk about the pros and cons of technology. In this regard, quite a few some people would deem that technology is focus on the detrimental impacts of technology, for life, but others, in contrast, believe that it is very useful and practical for everybody. As far as I am concerned, technology has great benefits and is essential to having a impacts on simpler life in that not only does it make works fast and easier, but also it causes to impose the higher quality of life.

    The first reason which should be mentioned here is that doing fast and quicker works is the most important role of technology in people lives. First, the use of technology means faster and more efficient processes in industry, agriculture and many other fields. Technology helps people save their time and money. Indeed, using of modern technology is either both time-saving or and cost-effective. For example, many universities nowadays offer online courses. nowadays, there are some universities in which are hold some online courses. So, Students can participate in them without needing to commute between the university and their homes. Another example showing the importance of technology is that individuals can transfer money in a few seconds by simply using the Internet. This increased efficiency in communications and online business transactions has led to immense economic benefits. Several number of money is transferred just in a few seconds through online accounts. It has a tremendous effect on urban life, especially in large cities, to reduce the air pollution and traffic problems.

    Another reason which should be seen by everyone is that Furthermore, technology directly affects the quality of people's lives, it promotes to high level of it. There and many high-tech gadgets facilities which are used by people nowadays for many purposes. For instance, some smart phones, besides that not only provide high-resolution quality of cameras, but also enable people to use apps for an incredible variety of purposes ranging from playing games to apps that monitor health. can help to keep health by some applications controlling health of a person. Another example of modern technology is the latest air-conditioner of air which both produces cold air, the air fresh and removes viruses and other germs at the same time. which is existed in the air.

    By and large, technology has a wealth of advantages for people's lives. It helps to make work easy and efficient.them to do works in an easy and fast way. Equally important, It also adds high quality to personal life. I believe that technology will continue to bring benefits to people's lives in the future. , all people will admire technology because of making their life simply.

    I advise you to use simpler clearer language in your writing.

    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Persian
      • Home Country:
      • Iran
      • Current Location:
      • Iran

    • Join Date: Jul 2015
    • Posts: 6
    #3

    Re: A/D: Technology desinged to make our life simply actually makes our life complica

    Hi dear teacher.
    I want to attend in TOEFL, and I need complex structures, but I am disappointed with my essay. Is that awful ? :(

  2. teechar's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Iraq
      • Current Location:
      • Iraq

    • Join Date: Feb 2015
    • Posts: 6,180
    #4

    Re: A/D: Technology desinged to make our life simply actually makes our life complica

    Quote Originally Posted by Vahid Azp View Post
    I need complex structures
    It's much more important to write clearly than to try to impress the teacher/examiner with unnecessarily complex writing.

    Quote Originally Posted by Vahid Azp View Post
    but I am disappointed with my essay. Is that it awful?
    Don't be disappointed at all! Your essay is not awful. Learn from your mistakes and consider the advice I gave you.
    You're welcome to post more essays to the forum, and we'll comment on your progress.

  3. emsr2d2's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • UK
      • Current Location:
      • UK

    • Join Date: Jul 2009
    • Posts: 41,830
    #5

    Re: A/D: Technology desinged to make our life simply actually makes our life complica

    Note that "simply" in your title should be "simple".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

  4. Tarheel's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • American English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States

    • Join Date: Jun 2014
    • Posts: 11,026
    #6

    Re: A/D: Technology desinged to make our life simply actually makes our life complica

    Vahid, please avoid using phrases that you have neither seen nor heard. People will not understand you. (I have never run across "challenge point" before.) Instead, use something that is already in use and that people will understand.

Similar Threads

  1. Replies: 18
    Last Post: 09-Nov-2013, 11:28
  2. Replies: 8
    Last Post: 25-May-2013, 22:13
  3. [Essay] IELTS Writing- technology leads to dying out of traditional skills and ways of life
    By jennychen in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 07-Jun-2011, 06:43
  4. Replies: 1
    Last Post: 04-Jul-2009, 20:42
  5. Replies: 2
    Last Post: 07-Dec-2007, 16:35

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •