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    Travelling to Russia

    I’d like to see Russia for many reasons like the historical background and the shuttle program. This is a fairly simple question and I will always want to find the answer by my own. When I read the newspaper, Russia is almost always the evil guy in the story and I always wonder why. My only answer is this is perhaps a marriage from a bad press in the US and a dark historical background but I will have to look further.

    Obliviously, I understand the economic is linked and the play an important role in Europe for their energy but I still want to learn more. On the other hand, the US is always here to protect us and want to save the world. I seem our world is growing faster and faster while we all try to find our on way to reach our goal. This is why I would like to travel to Russia. Second, I really like the architecture and their culture. The great churches of Kievan Rus will not disappointment if what I will see is as good as the picture.

    Nonetheless, I need to see if the price of their Vodka is really under 10$ and I am wondering whether the citizens are bossy and look serious or this is a myth.

    What do you think? Where in can improve my writing?
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    Re: Travelling to Russia

    Let's start with the first sentence.

    Quote Originally Posted by Slinky View Post
    Id like to see Russia for many reasons and my only reason is why not.
    There are many reasons you would like to visit Russia. ("Why not" is not a reason.) There are many reasons you would like to visit Russia. You would like to find out if the things you have heard about Russia are true. (Go in the summer. Russian winters are brutal.) You would like to know what the people are like. The architecture is fascinating to you. You want to stay in Moscow for the winter. (What's the matter with you? )

    So state that there are many reasons that you want to visit Russia, then state the reasons.

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    Re: Travelling to Russia

    If you delete the second sentence you will lose nothing. So do so.

    Quote Originally Posted by Slinky View Post
    When I read the newspaper, Russia is almost always the evil guy in the story and I always wonder why. My only answer is this is perhaps a marriage from a bad press in the US and a dark historical background but I will have to look further.
    If you read some books on Russian history that should help you with that.

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    Re: Travelling to Russia

    Your myths will disappear when you travel Russia. But if you want get to know Russia, you need to visit not just Moscow. Russia is a big and various country. I am sure it will be very interesting travel.

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    Re: Travelling to Russia

    I understand Russia is more interesting but for this exercice i'm trying to write a simple text.

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    Re: Travelling to Russia

    I am too. My English is enough bad. And don't check your text.
    I don't know I should to write in my own thread only

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    Re: Travelling to Russia

    Your myths misconceptions will disappear when you travel Russia after you have travelled to Russia. But if you want get to know Russia better, you will need to visit not just Moscow, but also the other parts of the country. Russia is a big and various diverse country. I am sure it will be very interesting travelling.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: Travelling to Russia

    Okay, I'm back. Let's see if we can finish this one.

    Quote Originally Posted by Slinky View Post
    Obliviously, I understand the economic is linked and the play an important role in Europe for their energy but I still want to learn more.
    That sentence requires the reader to guess at what you left out. In any case, I suggest that you stick to describing places you know about and talk about why you want to see them up close. (The Hermitage in Petrograd is supposed to be one of the world's best art museums.)

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    Quote Originally Posted by ...p View Post
    I am too. My English is enough bad. And don't check your text.
    I don't know I should to write in my own thread only
    Yes, please start your own thread for your own text and associated questions.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Travelling to Russia

    Apparently, your first reason is not really a reason, but it does have to do with the timing. You want to travel to Russia before the world blows up.

    Quote Originally Posted by Slinky View Post
    This is why I would like to travel to Russia. Second, I really like the architecture and their culture. The great churches of Kievan Rus will not disappoint me if what I will see is as good as the pictures.

    Also, I need to see if the price of their Vodka is really under 10$ a bottle, and I am wondering whether the citizens are bossy and look serious all the time or if that is a myth.

    What do you think? How can I improve my writing?
    You don't need to go there to find out what the price of vodka is there, so that is not really to visit Russia. Also, in the rest of North America (outside of Quebec) we put the dollar sign ($) before the number.

    Focus on what you want to say. Focus.

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