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    He! please to improve essay

    Hi I am polish!
    PLX !!!!

    My friend and why I sit in the bench with him.

    Rafał sit with me in the bench from the beginning of school year.
    This I approached first to him and I asked if he sits with me. He
    agreed from the time obviously, because he was new in our class. He
    is very friendly, because never oneself not kłoci, and many even
    helps me times. However he is the only school colleague, because I
    was never on the yard E.g. after the school with him.

    He is the quite ambitious person. He coaches athletics and learns to
    this well. All always tries to do on the time. He specialise in in
    scientific helps particularly. When someone does not know on the
    test, then Rafał always is able to him save. However it gets from
    the wise existence many a time and not he which things magnifies.
    This is his minus.

    I think that he is the wordy person, but he also is able to bear
    every secret. I that is why trust him in not which matters. I can
    him say about every thing. That is why also, I can even name him the
    friend. He shapes up that we will walk to this alone class at
    Secondary school. I am interesting or we will also sit together in
    the bench there.

    I would like to add that he was the "unusual"person. Rafał is the
    good colleague and all like him for this


    GOOD??? NO??? PLX RECHARGING!!


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    Re: He! please to improve essay

    Quote Originally Posted by Adrians
    Hi I am polish!
    PLX !!!!
    My friend and why I sit in the bench with him.
    Rafał sit with me in the bench from the beginning of school year.
    This I approached first to him and I asked if he sits with me. He
    agreed from the time obviously, because he was new in our class. He
    is very friendly, because never oneself not kłoci, and many even
    helps me times. However he is the only school colleague, because I
    was never on the yard E.g. after the school with him.
    He is the quite ambitious person. He coaches athletics and learns to
    this well. All always tries to do on the time. He specialise in in
    scientific helps particularly. When someone does not know on the
    test, then Rafał always is able to him save. However it gets from
    the wise existence many a time and not he which things magnifies.
    This is his minus.
    I think that he is the wordy person, but he also is able to bear
    every secret. I that is why trust him in not which matters. I can
    him say about every thing. That is why also, I can even name him the
    friend. He shapes up that we will walk to this alone class at
    Secondary school. I am interesting or we will also sit together in
    the bench there.
    I would like to add that he was the "unusual"person. Rafał is the
    good colleague and all like him for this
    GOOD??? NO??? PLX RECHARGING!!
    Rather than explain every point, I will capitalize where I would change your prose. If you do not understand the reasons for a change, tell me which ones you are confused about, and I will try to explain.

    My Friend and Why I Sit With Him

    Rafał HAS SAT ON THE SAME SCHOOL BENCH AS me from the beginning of THE school year. I approached him FIRST and asked if he WOULD SIT with me. He agreed AT the time obviously, because he was new in our class. He
    is very friendly, [because never oneself not kłoci - I do not know the Polish word 'kloci', so I do not understand this], and many TIMES HE HAS even
    helpED ME. However he is NO MORE THAN A school colleague, because I
    was never [on the yard - it is unclear what you mean by this], e.g. after school with him.

    He is quite AN ambitious person. He coaches athletics and HAS LEARNED TO DO this well. HE always tries to do EVERYTHING on time. He specialiseS in
    scientific ASSISTANCE particularly. When someone does not know SOMETHING on A test, then Rafał IS always able to RESCUE him. [However it gets from the wise existence many a time and not he which things magnifies - this is very difficult to understand - can you rephrase it?]. This is his FAILING.

    I think that he is AN EXUBERANT [someone who talks a lot is 'garrulent', but this is rather a flowery word] person, but he IS also able to KEEP secretS. That is why trust I him in MANY matters. I can TELL him everything. That is also WHY I can COUNT him AS A friend. He HAS SUGGESTED that we walk to class TOGETHER at Secondary school. I am interestED IN THIS or PERHAPS we will also sit together AT SCHOOL there.

    I would like to add that he IS AN "unusual" person. Rafał is A good colleague and EVERYONE likeS him for this.

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