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    Peter was afraid

    Would you please help me and correct the mistakes in my sentence? I am not sure if its phrasing and punctuation are correct.

    Peter was afraid of losing his job because without it he would be nothing - a plain, small man who no woman would ever glance at in the street.

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    Re: Peter was afraid

    Peter was afraid of losing his job because, without it, he would be nothing but a plain, small man whom no woman would ever glance at in the street.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: Peter was afraid

    Thank you, tedmc,

    You don't think that I could use a dash sign in my sentence (nothing - plain, small man)?

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    Re: Peter was afraid

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post
    ... a plain, small man whom no woman would ever glance at in the street.
    If I recall correctly, the teachers said that 'who' was more common than 'whom'.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: Peter was afraid

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    You don't think that I could use a dash sign in my sentence (nothing - plain, small man)?
    I think you could.

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    #6

    Re: Peter was afraid

    If you did that you can't omit 'a' before 'plain'.

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    Re: Peter was afraid

    Quote Originally Posted by Rover_KE View Post
    If you did that you can't omit 'a' before 'plain'.
    You are., of course, right. Sorry, Bassim. I missed that.

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    Re: Peter was afraid

    Matthew, that is true, but "whom" is still correct.

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    #9

    Re: Peter was afraid

    ***** NOT A TEACHER *****

    Hello, Bassim:

    May I just point out three unimportant points?

    1. Some people would use two lines for a dash. (One line is a hyphen.) Thus: "We are alike -- on the inside." -- Mark Twain.

    2. If you wish to avoid the who / whom controversy, use neither. A relative pronoun is not necessary in your sentence, especially in speech.

    3. Some people might be more comfortable with "on the street."


    Thus: "Peter was afraid of losing his job because, without it, he would be nothing -- a plain, small man no woman would ever even glance at on the street."

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    Re: Peter was afraid

    Quote Originally Posted by MikeNewYork View Post
    Matthew, that is true, but "whom" is still correct.
    If 'whom' is used, would it be better to put 'at' before it, i.e. 'at whom'?
    I am not a teacher.

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