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    I want to express " the business owners' perceived success of the business" in the last part. Do I have to say "his or her" in front of "perceived success"? If not, is it okay for me to say "his or her" in front of "perceived success"? Is the use of "what type of leadership" right? Is the use of "lead to" right?

    Although previous research have examined the impact of leadership style and managemenent skills in the business owner on small business success, there has been little research examining what type of leadership or leadership behavior and management skills in the business owner has lead to his or her perceived success of the business and the underlying themes and contexts that account for his or her perceived success of the business
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    Re: his or her

    The grammar seems okay but your meaning is not clear. Do you mean perceived success versus actual success?

    This would be better as at least two sentences and it's quite wordy.
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    #3

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    I would use "business owners" and "their". This has the added virtue of being closer to the truth because it's business owners that were studied, and the not "the business owner".
    It should also be, "Although previous research has examined ..."

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    #4

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    It should read "has led" not "has lead".

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    And previous research has examined.

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    Thank you for your responses. They are helpful. Is the following right, then? The purpose of the study is to fill the gap by examining 1) what type of leadership or leadership behavior has led to business owners' perceived success of the business?, 2) what type of management skills in business owners has led to their perceived success of the business?, and 3) what are the underlying themes and contexts that account for business owners’ perceived success of the business?
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    I don't know how you can say that a skill leads to a perception.

    Are you sure you are using "perceived" correctly?

    Again, are you comparing their perception of their success with externally quantifiable metrics? And you are showing what behaviors lead to this perception? That does not make sense!
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    I mean, a skill and behavior lead to the success that is perceived by business owners. In this case, does the above sentence make sense? Or How about the following sentence?

    The purpose of the study is to fill the gap by examining 1) what type of leadership or leadership behavior has led to the success of the business perceived by business owners'?, 2) what type of management skills in business owners has led to the success of the business perceived by them?, and 3) what are the underlying themes and contexts that account for the success of the business perceived by them?
    Last edited by eunkum; 03-Aug-2015 at 19:59.

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    Someone else needs to answer you. I still don't understand what you mean by the business owner's "perceived success." Either they made money or they didn't. Either they gained market share or they didn't. Either they enjoyed a good reputation and had repeat business from their customers, or they didn't.

    What is the "perception of success" here?
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    Perceived success suggests to me that they could regard themselves as successful when they might not be- it's a perception, not a fact. Do you mean What type of leadership or leadership behaviour is seen by the owners as leading to the success of the business?

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