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    Post GRE issue essay practice: Should governments offer free college education?

    Here is the prompt:
    Governments should offer college and university education free of charge to all students.
    Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.


    Here is what I wrote:

    Governments are elected by the people to make major choices for them. A wise government therefore makes the most effective decision by weighing between the minor sacrifices to be made now and guaranteeing a better future for the country. Offering free college and university education is one of these decisions that they should clearly make. By doing that, the government can prove itself to be a responsible, as well as visionary one.

    It is the government's responsibility to make sure that teenagers, regardless of their family background, stand on equal footings in terms of education. Across North America, college tuition fee has been increasing in the last couple decades. Even though students are allowed to work since their teenagehood, few of them can save enough money for further education. Fundings from families still count a big part for many college studentsí college tuition cost. Unfortunately, it has to be admitted that for various reasons, many people do not have the backings from their parents even if they have the talent and diligence. Owing to the unfairness that the students should not responsible for, some have to either give up their dreams or work hard at a low wage to make savings for it. A responsible government should not make teenagers lose their dreams because they were not born into supportive families.

    Apart from the required responsibility, governments also need to offer free post-secondary education as a means to invest in its future. The world economy is booming both at unprecedented scale and speed. At the same time, the structure of the wealth changes too. Some countries are better off by doing the more intellectual part of a job, and lever the more enviromentally damaging and less profitable parts to others. In this global trend, education makes a key difference for determining which country has a more intellectual work force that wins the most rewarding chunk of business. By offering free post-secondary education, the country can therefore either win or maintain its competency in the global market.

    Some people do worry about the financial cost of offering free post-secondary education, but from historical evidence, it has been proven that the benefit would far outweigh the concern. Germany has for a long time been divided and had an underdeveloped education system. After realizing this serious problem, its prime minister Otto Von Bismark decided to invest heavily in education, which makes Germany a technological giant and a powerful engine of the European economy even up to this day. Roughly around the same period of time, Meiji Japan followed the same path in the 1870s. The emperor voluntarily deducted his living cost to help cover the cost of free post-secondary education. Looking back, the costs that Germany and Japan made have surely paid off.

    In conclusion, governments should offer free post-secondary education, for it is both its responsibility, as well as a wise way of investing its funds. With historical proofs, there is no reason to doubt this trivial monetary sacrifice, while a promising long-term gain could be made.

    Thanks for marking! Feel free to tell me what you would give me out of 10.

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    Re: GRE issue essay practice: Should governments offer free college education?

    Governments are elected by the people to make major choices for them. A wise government therefore makes would make the most effective decision by weighing between the minor sacrifices to be made now and guaranteeing a better future for the country. Offering free college and university education is one of these decisions that they should clearly make. By doing that, the government can prove itself to be a responsible(,) as well as visionary one.

    It is the government's responsibility to make sure that teenagers young people, regardless of their family background, stand on equal footings in terms of education. Across North America, college tuition fees has been increasing in the last couple of decades. Even though students are allowed to work since their teenagehood, few of them can save enough money for further education. Fundings from families still count contribute a big part for towards many college studentsí college tuition costs. Unfortunately, it has to be admitted is a reality that, for various reasons, many people do not have the backings from their parents even if they have the talent and diligence. Owing to the unfairness that the students should not responsible be made to pay for, some have to either give up their dreams or work hard at a low wage to make savings for it ends meet. A responsible government should not make teenagers lose forsake their dreams because they were not born into supportive families.

    Apart from the required responsibility, governments also need to offer free post-second education as a means to invest in its young people's future. The world economy is booming both at an unprecedented scale and speed. At the same time, the structure of the wealth changes too. Some countries are better off by doing the more intellectual part of a job, and leveraging the more enviromentally damaging and less profitable parts to others. In this global trend, education makes a key difference for in determining which country has a more intellectual work force that wins the most rewarding chunk of business. By offering free post-secondary education, the country can therefore either would have a more highly skilled workforce and is in a position to win gain or maintain its competency in the global market.

    Some people do worry about the financial costs of offering free post-secondary education, but from historical evidence, it has been proven that the benefits would far outweigh the concerns. Germany has had for a long time been divided and had an underdeveloped education system. After realizing this serious problem, its prime minister Otto Von Bismark decided to invest heavily in education, which makes had made Germany a technological giant and a powerful engine of the European economy even up to this day. Roughly around the same period of time, Emperor Meiji of Japan followed the same path in the 1870s. The emperor voluntarily deducted utilized his living cost to help cover the cost of free post-secondary education. Looking back, the costs measures that Germany and Japan made have had surely paid off.

    In conclusion, governments should offer free post-secondary education, for it is both its responsibility, as well as a wise way of investing its funds. With From historical proofs, there is no reason to doubt this that the trivial minor monetary sacrifice, while would bring about a promising rewarding long-term gain could be made.

    Rating: 7/10
    Last edited by tedmc; 06-Aug-2015 at 16:14.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: GRE issue essay practice: Should governments offer free college education?

    Hi tedmc, do you think if I made strong arguments in this essay? Or the 7/10 is given because there were so many grammar mistakes?
    Thanks!

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