Results 1 to 2 of 2
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Serbo-Croatian
      • Home Country:
      • Bosnia Herzegovina
      • Current Location:
      • Sweden

    • Join Date: Mar 2008
    • Posts: 3,588

    Some men had taken

    I am currently writing a short story, and I am not sure about these two sentences regarding their construction and punctuation. Would you please help me and correct my mistakes?

    Some men had taken the old, moth-eaten uniforms, which had not seen the light for decades, out of their cupboards and hidden wardrobes. They cleaned them carefully, pinned the old medals on, and all in black, strutted the streets like sinister ghosts, speaking about the imminent killing and destruction.

  1. Piscean's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • Czech Republic
      • Current Location:
      • Czech Republic

    • Join Date: Jul 2015
    • Posts: 9,991

    Re: Some men had taken

    It looks fine to me, but I'd add a comma between 'and' and 'all in black'.

Similar Threads

  1. some men/a group of men
    By navi tasan in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: 09-Sep-2014, 09:08
  2. you are men
    By frindle in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 13-Dec-2011, 13:55
  3. what in the world is this? men-to-men
    By saramehr in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 24-Mar-2010, 07:28
  4. Men are different
    By analyzer in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 6
    Last Post: 25-Mar-2008, 02:02


Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts