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    Help please

    Hi everyone , I need help ,

    The text below is an exercise I've given to myself (Did I write it on correct way) I realy like English but I have no one to spike with , so I have to practice with myself.
    Also I'd be happy if you recomend me some site or something like that , where I can correspond with native speakers. Thanks in advance


    "l've been walking when he came to me and asked me for a lighter. He tried to talk with me. While he was lighting a cigarette his partner came behind my back and took my wallet. The police came as fast as they can . They gave the best of themselves . My wallet has returned to me."

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    Re: Help please

    Quote Originally Posted by tone111 View Post
    Hi everyone. I need help.

    The text below is an exercise I've given to myself (​did I write it on correct way that correctly?) I really like English but I have no one to spike speak it with so I have to practise with myself.

    Also, I'd be happy if you would/could recommend me some sites (or something like that) where I can correspond with native speakers. Thanks in advance.


    "l've been I was walking when he a man came up to me and asked me for a lighter. He tried to talk with to me. While he was lighting a cigarette, his partner came went behind my back and took my wallet. The police came as fast as they can could. They gave the best of themselves. My wallet has been returned to me."
    See above for my corrections, marked in red. Don't put a space before a full stop. "They gave the best of themselves" is grammatically correct but not very natural in everyday speech. I would say something like "They did a really good job".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #3

    Re: Help please

    Grammar aside, I notice there is an abrupt change of scene after the thief took your wallet from behind. The police came into the picture from nowhere, which leaves the reader wondering.

    I think you "practise by yourself" and not "practise with yourself".
    I am not a teacher.

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    #4

    Re: Help please

    I agree - the OP should perhaps add "I called the police and they came as fast as they could".

    I left "with myself" because I assumed the OP meant that he/she speaks dialogues, playing both parts. I did not necessarily assume that "by myself/on my own" was meant. It was preceded by "I have no one to speak with" so I took the next part to mean "so I speak/converse/chat with myself". It is ambiguous though.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #5

    Re: Help please

    I find "they gave the best of themselves" a bit overdone. I would say "they did their best" or something like that.

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    #6

    Re: Help please

    In my opinion, the first sentence should start with "I had been walking". And in a subsequent sentence, "spike" should be "speak".

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    Re: Help please

    As I showed in my corrected piece, I was quite happy with "I was walking". The two happened at the same time - the walking and the mugging.

    I already changed "spike" to "speak" in post #2.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #8

    Re: Help please

    I think tone111 was aiming for 'no one to Skipe with'.

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    #9

    Re: Help please

    That's possible. Did you mean "Skype"?

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    #10

    Re: Help please

    Yes. They call it 'Facetime' on my iPad.

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