Bassim
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These two sentences are from my short story. I am not sure about the second one and the part, "as if he had been imploring God." I am wondering if I could also use "as if he were imploring God."
Would you please take a look at them and correct my mistakes.
The young man passed by Jasmine’s overgrown garden and his breast constricted with pain. Jasmine, please help me. He repeated his prayer over and over as if he had been imploring God.
Would you please take a look at them and correct my mistakes.
The young man passed by Jasmine’s overgrown garden and his breast constricted with pain. Jasmine, please help me. He repeated his prayer over and over as if he had been imploring God.