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    Help paragraph writing and possibly an essay

    Was wondering If I could use this as a four point thesis statement?

    Sponges are made of of four independent cells.

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    I was wondering if this is fine as a paragraph:

    Collar cells line the interior canal wall of the sponge. Attached to the collar cells are little hair like appendages that whip back and forth, this whipping action helps pump water through the sponge, which results in supplying the sponge with nutrient and oxygen while removing waste and carbon dioxide from it's environment.

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    Re: Help paragraph writing and possibly an essay

    Collar cells line the interior canal walls of the sponge. Attached to the collar cells are little hair-like appendages that whip back and forth; this whipping action helps pump water through the sponge, which results in the supplying of nutrient and oxygen to the sponge with nutrient and oxygen while removing waste and carbon dioxide from it's its environment are removed.
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    What do you mean by "Sponges are made of four independent cells." Most sponges I've seen have a lot more than four cells - in fact, a four-cell sponge would be almost invisible. Do you mean "four types of independent cell? In what way are they independent if they have to join together to make a sponge work?
    Your thesis statement would work if all these questions are answered.

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    Re: Help paragraph writing and possibly an essay

    Yes, thanks, "Sponges are made of four independent cells".

    Collar cells line the interior canal walls of the sponge. Attached to the collar cells are little hair-like appendages that whip back and forth; this whipping action helps pump water through the sponge, which results in the supplying of nutrient and oxygen to the sponge while waste and carbon dioxide from it's its environmentare removed.

    Collar cells line the interior canal walls of the sponge. Attached to the collar cells are little hair-like appendages that whip back and forth; this whipping action helps pump water through the (can I put the word porifera here?), which results in the supply of nutrient and oxygen to the ( can I put the word animal here?) while (not sure how to use the symbol for here ?)waste and carbon dioxide from its environment are removed.

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    Nutrient? or nutrients?

    Thanks everyone for your help.

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    Re: Help paragraph writing and possibly an essay

    Hows this:

    Sponges are scientifically named porifera (meaning pore-bearing), they are made up of four main types of cells.??

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    Sorry there are several different types of cells in the sponge.

    Hows this: The sponge, also known scientifically as porifera, is made up of four main cells.
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    Re: Help paragraph writing and possibly an essay

    Sponges, scientifically named porifera, which means "pore-bearing", are made up of four main types of cells.

    There should be more than one type of nutrient, so "nutrients".
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    Re: Help paragraph writing and possibly an essay

    help with this please:

    Because of the lifestyle that the sea sponge leads, it does not have, nor does it need, nerve cells or muscle cells. Also, sensory organs such as; eyes, ears, nose, touch, tongue are absent, Which are the traditionally recognized senses of most animals. The sea sponge also lacks a digestive track, circulatory system and nervous system or internal organs of any kind.
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    Collar cells line the interior canal walls of the sponge. Attached to the collar cells are little hair-like appendages that whip back and forth; this whipping action helps pump water through the porifera, which results in the supply of nutrient and oxygen to the animal while waste and carbon dioxide from its environment are removed.

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