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    Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    Please evaluate my IELTS essay and point out any errors .

    Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    Being as a part of free society, everyone has right to speak freely regardless of any consequences associated with it. Education and media play an important role in creating awareness among the people of the society and realize them about the power of their words. Some people argue that freedom of speech is not necessary. However, others state that it helps in strengthening rules and regulation of the society. I believe that for the betterment of state offices and to eliminate the wrongdoing of society, people should raise their voice freely.

    In most of the cases the problems arise when people did not raise their voice for their legal rights in the society. By doing so, they give chance to their opponent to do whatever they want to do. For example, in Pakistan government has increasing the price of food for the last two years, but nobody was taking any stand against government. Recently, people stood up very strongly when government suddenly increases the petroleum prices. They raised their voice on all national and international media and pressurize their state to rollback their decision about fuel prices immediately.

    Secondly, everyone has its own view whether other people like it or not. By giving value to people point of view many things can be improved and run in the way people want.

    Finally, according to my point of view, we cannot build better society unless we don’t care about the people opinion. That is why freedom of speech is essential in all permitted societies.
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    Re: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    Please evaluate ​my IELTS essay and point our out any errors. and mistakes.
    I don't have time to look at your essays at the moment but I noticed that all your posts start with the same sentence, which contains errors. Please note my corrections above. It's unnecessary to say "errors and mistakes" - they mean the same thing. Use one or the other.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    Please help me to improve my writing skills.

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    Re: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    That's what I tried to do in post #2!
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    i mean please also point out errors in the essay. i wil be very thankful.

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    Re: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    I mean please also point out errors in the essay. I will be very thankful.
    I know what you meant but, as I said in post #2, I don't have time to deal with an entire essay at the moment. You need to remember that we are all volunteers here and we do what we can in our free time. Essays (and most posts in the Editing and Writing Topics section) get much less attention than short questions in the "Ask A Teacher" section.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    I understand my friend. Actually i am new to english writing, thats why i am trying hard to imrpove my writing.

    any how thankyou so much for your support.

    keep in touch with your useful comments.

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    Re: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    Being as a part of In any free society, everyone has should have the right to speak (and express themselves) freely regardless of without worrying about any consequences associated with that. it. Education and the media play an important role in creating awareness among the people of the in a society and realize can (effectively) teach them about the power of their words. Some people argue that freedom of speech is not necessary. However, others state that it is an essential constituent of a healthy helps in strengthening rules and regulation of the society. I believe that for the betterment of state offices institutions and to eliminate the wrongdoing of in society, people should be free to raise express their views. their voice freely.

    In most of the many cases, the problems arises when people did do not raise their voice to assert for their legal rights in a country. the society. By doing so, they give the chance to their opponents to do whatever they want to do. For example, in Pakistan the government has been increasing the price of basic foodstuffs for the last two years, but nobody was taking took any stand against government. Recently, people stood up very strongly when the government suddenly increased the petrol eum prices. They raised their voices on all in the national and international media and pressurized the government ir state to roll back their decision about fuel prices immediately.

    Secondly, everyone has its their own view whether other people like it or not. By giving value to people's point of view, many things can be improved and run in the way people want.

    Finally, according to my point of view, we cannot build a better society unless if we don't care about the people's opinions. That is why freedom of speech is essential in all permitted civilized societies.
    Note that your second body paragraph is just two lines! that's not acceptable.
    Your essay is also missing a conclusion.

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    Thank you so much for your valuable efforts and time. I will try to improve by not making such error you pointed out.

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    Re: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

    Quote Originally Posted by fahad_a11 View Post
    I understand. my friend. Actually, I am new to English writing, that's why I am trying hard to imrpove improve my writing.

    any howAnyway, thank (space required here) you so much for your support.

    Keep in touch with your useful comments.
    In each one of my posts, I have shown you corrections to your (lack of) capitalisation. You must capitalise the first letter of every sentence and you must capitalise the word "I" every time you write it. Look at all my posts again, including the corrected quote above, and use correct capitalisation from now on. We like to see that our help and advice are being heeded.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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